On the Edge of Deception
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "On the Edge of Deception - Pg 7"Mystery, Abuse and Crime
14 total reviews
Comment from karenina
OH no............
This is the way life goes sometimes.
Just when you think it can't get worse, another boulder falls to crush all hope.
You're truly enmeshing the dichotomy of our social ills within this story...
Rampant child abuse...
Fake News...
Bad people attracting worse people...
Good Samaritans being scapegoated and ridiculed...
The victim blaming...
The rabid press...
I have come to truly admire the story work done...and now have begun so assimilate the deeper meaning, the metaphor for today's world in so many ways!
IN this way you've taken a giant step into a timeless tale. One I am immersed in.
One I am spurred on to follow.
One I will not soon forget!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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OH no............
This is the way life goes sometimes.
Just when you think it can't get worse, another boulder falls to crush all hope.
You're truly enmeshing the dichotomy of our social ills within this story...
Rampant child abuse...
Fake News...
Bad people attracting worse people...
Good Samaritans being scapegoated and ridiculed...
The victim blaming...
The rabid press...
I have come to truly admire the story work done...and now have begun so assimilate the deeper meaning, the metaphor for today's world in so many ways!
IN this way you've taken a giant step into a timeless tale. One I am immersed in.
One I am spurred on to follow.
One I will not soon forget!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Good morning, my love.... you have given me one awesome gift. I can not thank you enough for the generosity, time, thoughtfulness and raving reviews. Also, because of you all chapters except 1 and 2 (which are only one review away) have been recognized and have blue ribbons. i was stunned when I got home last night from the film set and found 50 - fifty - reviews on Deception and Matt's story. Couldn't have asked for anything more. I saved yours for last so I can read each one carefully and enjoy. You have been the best for this old lady...Thanks! Sending smiles, hugs and so much more-- Carol
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I DI notice (and was thrilled) that on a few of these I was review number 15...and I knew you'd find recognition waiting for you! A few are now on the cusp--14! I'm spreading the word to some friends... Can't guarantee anything...but then again, it's my pleasure to guide them to great writing!--Karenina
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You are awesome! Never get tired of telling you that. About to wrap up another chapter before I get ready to go to Matthew's film set. Smiles, Carol
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You are SO sweet! Thanks, Karenina
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Oh no! I hope he doesn't hurt her. This is a twist in the story. So much is happening to poor Beth that it looks like a never-ending bad streak is in the cards. Is this the rough part you mentioned?
Ralf
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Oh no! I hope he doesn't hurt her. This is a twist in the story. So much is happening to poor Beth that it looks like a never-ending bad streak is in the cards. Is this the rough part you mentioned?
Ralf
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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The next chapter is ugly. I had a very difficult time writing it, but I needed it for the story in the end. Not what I wanted to write, but what the story declared I would. Crazy when the writing owns you!
Comment from royowen
What a horrible place to be, seemingly deserted by her only friend Rachel, rescued by a good bloke, but even there, she feels completely deserted, but one ray of hope, is that Dwight will expose the true him, the cruel, abusive miscreant thst he is. Well done, great job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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What a horrible place to be, seemingly deserted by her only friend Rachel, rescued by a good bloke, but even there, she feels completely deserted, but one ray of hope, is that Dwight will expose the true him, the cruel, abusive miscreant thst he is. Well done, great job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I so much want to give Dwight what he deserves right this very minute, but it can't happen just yet. Poor Beth really got a double whammy with Rachel, but maybe the teenager friend will come to her senses. We can hope! Thanks so much, Roy. Smiles, Carol
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Great story Carol.
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Thank so much, Roy. Hope you had a wonderful day. Smiles - Carol
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You too Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
What is the old saying, "Out of the frying pan, into the oven." Things don't look too bright for Beth right now. And who says the bad guys don't win, or at least for a spell. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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What is the old saying, "Out of the frying pan, into the oven." Things don't look too bright for Beth right now. And who says the bad guys don't win, or at least for a spell. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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YOUR ARE AWESOME! Yes, for a while the bad guys are going to have the upper hand but there's lots more to happen too. I thank you for the beautiful stars and the big smile they put on my face. Have a wonderful day! Smiles to you - Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This isn't going to end well, is it? I am so helping Beth somehow gets in contact with Betts. This is another good installment. You are doing a good job writing this story.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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This isn't going to end well, is it? I am so helping Beth somehow gets in contact with Betts. This is another good installment. You are doing a good job writing this story.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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It's going to be pretty bad for a while in so many ways - I hope I can pull the story off because some of the things are just way out of my wheelhouse of writing. I struggle to write each chapter - something I'm not really use to doing. Thanks again for all your support, Barbara. Smiles to you. Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another interesting installment. It was a good read from beginning to end. The hook at the end wants me to keep reading. I always like your use of space.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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This is another interesting installment. It was a good read from beginning to end. The hook at the end wants me to keep reading. I always like your use of space.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for taking the time to follow my story and for the kind thoughts. I am glad that you are enjoying it. Smiles!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
CAROL!!!! What are you doing to me? That poor girl has lost everything, and everyone, now. I can't believe her best forever friend would believe all that rubbish. There's one social worker(?) who doesn't believe that drunken slob and his lying bit of stuff, she has to get to Beth as soon as possible! This is brilliant writing, Carol, you really had my heart pounding. And now you've left us with a really awful cliff-hanger! Well done, my friend!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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CAROL!!!! What are you doing to me? That poor girl has lost everything, and everyone, now. I can't believe her best forever friend would believe all that rubbish. There's one social worker(?) who doesn't believe that drunken slob and his lying bit of stuff, she has to get to Beth as soon as possible! This is brilliant writing, Carol, you really had my heart pounding. And now you've left us with a really awful cliff-hanger! Well done, my friend!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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good morning. Sandra. I guess some of my stress has bubbled over into sweet Beth and it's just going to get worse - but it will get better I hope. I truly am getting into this story and I believe when it's done I'll polish it and combine it with Cold Case and maybe one of my old stories and see if I can publish if you are still willing to tell me how it's done. For the first time in quite some time, I'm feeling exceptionally good about my writing and that's saying a lot for me. I'm so glad you like this story. Thanks so much for sticking with me. Smiles to you! Always my friend, Carol
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Of course I'll help you, that's what friends do! I think you'll have a nice size book when you've finished putting them together. And you should feel good about your writing, you are good at it!!!
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Awww! You are the best! Smiles and ((Hugs))
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
Another great read, this story is moving along nicely. The dialogue is natural and believable. I am pleased that you have given us a "what next" moment, leaving us eager for the next chapter. Thank you.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Another great read, this story is moving along nicely. The dialogue is natural and believable. I am pleased that you have given us a "what next" moment, leaving us eager for the next chapter. Thank you.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for hanging out with my troubled people and sweet Beth. I always hope to leave that hook at an end of a chapter if I can. Smiles to you - Carol
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It is my pleasure Carol, I don't have any six stars left I'm afraid :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping! Sickening--and I say that as a compliment. This poor girl will be suffering worse to come--heartrending to have her friend abandon her. Magnificent work. Surely this is publishable!
The warm shafts of sunlight flowed through the window [sugg: comma] filling the room with warmth.
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Gripping! Sickening--and I say that as a compliment. This poor girl will be suffering worse to come--heartrending to have her friend abandon her. Magnificent work. Surely this is publishable!
The warm shafts of sunlight flowed through the window [sugg: comma] filling the room with warmth.
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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I am going to try my hand at publishing once this is completed. I thought I might combine several of the ones I've written. thanks so much for your kindness. and for the help of course...fixes done. Smiles to you, Liz - Carol
Comment from lyenochka
That's pretty daring to take a shower in a stranger's house without knowing when and who might come in at any time. I would think she should have gone straight to the police first and none of this would have happened. But you needed a plot, I get it.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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That's pretty daring to take a shower in a stranger's house without knowing when and who might come in at any time. I would think she should have gone straight to the police first and none of this would have happened. But you needed a plot, I get it.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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She's sixteen, lost her mother, and like many battered and abused people they don't report it to the police, unfortunately. yes I needed a plot! LOL Thanks, Helen
