Love's Yearning
A woman longing for her soldier to come home2 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These homecomings are special as so many soldiers don't quite make it and you described the return with love in your heart and an understanding for their occupation here, what would be do without brave soldiers, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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These homecomings are special as so many soldiers don't quite make it and you described the return with love in your heart and an understanding for their occupation here, what would be do without brave soldiers, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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Tx so much Dolly❤️
Comment from Pantygynt
While this poem expresses the love felt by the woman for her soldier boy, I don't think you have caught the style of the Atrina. Here are the givewn instructions for the style:
'Each line consists of 8 beats.
The first and last lines in each verse are exactly the same.
The third line in each verse is of similar wording to the second line or reversed I however prefer it if you use the same words but reversed.
Then when you have written the three verses.
The fourth verse consists of the first two lines from each of the three verses.'
Your poem, unfortunately, does not conform to this plan and is not therefore compliant so it is not an Atrina.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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While this poem expresses the love felt by the woman for her soldier boy, I don't think you have caught the style of the Atrina. Here are the givewn instructions for the style:
'Each line consists of 8 beats.
The first and last lines in each verse are exactly the same.
The third line in each verse is of similar wording to the second line or reversed I however prefer it if you use the same words but reversed.
Then when you have written the three verses.
The fourth verse consists of the first two lines from each of the three verses.'
Your poem, unfortunately, does not conform to this plan and is not therefore compliant so it is not an Atrina.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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I am just learning. This is my first attempt. Thank you
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That's fine. We all make mistakes as we learn. The first rule is to follow the requirements for that particular contest. Better luck next time.
