Haiku 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Sparrows Start to Nest"Haiku Club Submissions 2021
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written haiku. Sparrows huddle in congenial nest. No place like home. Beautiful photo selection to compliment your poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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This is a nicely written haiku. Sparrows huddle in congenial nest. No place like home. Beautiful photo selection to compliment your poem. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Joanne :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from JudyE
Look at those cute little heads. Baby birds can be pretty ugly till they get their feathers. These look very serious. I like to think of birds pairing for life.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Look at those cute little heads. Baby birds can be pretty ugly till they get their feathers. These look very serious. I like to think of birds pairing for life.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thanks for your lovely feedback, Judy :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
It's so cool that you are using these seasonal references for the club haiku writing! It's marvelous to see the faithfulness of some birds and how they do life together.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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It's so cool that you are using these seasonal references for the club haiku writing! It's marvelous to see the faithfulness of some birds and how they do life together.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Hi Helen :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback.
The almanac provided in the last haiku club event is proving to be a useful tool!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Anne Johnston
"sparrows huddle
in congenial nest --
no place like home"
Great idea for your Haiku. Thank you for sharing all the information about the sparrows.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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"sparrows huddle
in congenial nest --
no place like home"
Great idea for your Haiku. Thank you for sharing all the information about the sparrows.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Anne, for your nice feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
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You are welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Sparrows Start to Nest
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I love your haiku for the kigo event. Good syllables count and connection between lines....it flows well. I like the imagery and the satori is very clever and thought-provoking. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Sparrows Start to Nest
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I love your haiku for the kigo event. Good syllables count and connection between lines....it flows well. I like the imagery and the satori is very clever and thought-provoking. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your kind and encouraging feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sharon Davis
Nice work on creating a picture of sparrows content in their home environment. Great choices of image and backdrop colors that enhance the mental picture created by the poem's words.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Nice work on creating a picture of sparrows content in their home environment. Great choices of image and backdrop colors that enhance the mental picture created by the poem's words.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming--evocative and elegant imagery--great use of "congenial" and "huddle"--witty closer takes a familiar phrase and puts a fresh twist in this context. Fascinating notes!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Charming--evocative and elegant imagery--great use of "congenial" and "huddle"--witty closer takes a familiar phrase and puts a fresh twist in this context. Fascinating notes!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Cheers Liz :) I appreciate your time reading and reviewing.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sally Law
They do, and love us here in Florida. They made a home in our front door wreath last year. I've learned not to spend too much money on wreaths. The nest was full though and worth it. A lovely uplifting piece for today, dear Debra.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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They do, and love us here in Florida. They made a home in our front door wreath last year. I've learned not to spend too much money on wreaths. The nest was full though and worth it. A lovely uplifting piece for today, dear Debra.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Hello Sal :)
How cool to have sparrows nesting in the door wreath!
Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this haiku. While not the traditional 5-7-5, I was told by a haiku publisher that American haiku does not follow such traditions. It also looks like you found the perfect picture! Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for sharing this haiku. While not the traditional 5-7-5, I was told by a haiku publisher that American haiku does not follow such traditions. It also looks like you found the perfect picture! Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
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You're welcome!
Comment from Legendary Carrie
I like the L. Frank Baum reference. It's a sweet little poem. I also learned about sparrows. It was concise and interesting and informative. I could see myself reading this in an encyclopedia or in an almanac.
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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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I like the L. Frank Baum reference. It's a sweet little poem. I also learned about sparrows. It was concise and interesting and informative. I could see myself reading this in an encyclopedia or in an almanac.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your feedback :)
