A Perfect Spring Day
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A beautifully penned poem with perfect use of the words mentioned in the contest. It is romantic and is sure to kindly the memories of many readers. The background picture is a perfect match. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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A beautifully penned poem with perfect use of the words mentioned in the contest. It is romantic and is sure to kindly the memories of many readers. The background picture is a perfect match. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. Have a wonderful day. :)
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
This is a gently sweet poem that is indicative of newness, but you spend your time with someone you've been with for a long time. I did not see the word "sunset" in your work? Also in the first stanza, it should be "sways," because the subject of the sentence is the "first blush", not fliers.
Despite these small errors, this is a very lovely poem.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings, Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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This is a gently sweet poem that is indicative of newness, but you spend your time with someone you've been with for a long time. I did not see the word "sunset" in your work? Also in the first stanza, it should be "sways," because the subject of the sentence is the "first blush", not fliers.
Despite these small errors, this is a very lovely poem.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings, Cindy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thanks for your suggestions and nice review. Sunset is in the second line. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
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Sorry I missed ?sunset.?
It?s a beautiful poem.
Comment from greyson ernst
this is amazing im sorry i have not been reviewing for awhile my computer broke but anyways this is spectacular have a good good spring and as always keep writing and stay safe have a good monday also maybe next time you should make a sonnet
sincerely Greyson ernst
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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this is amazing im sorry i have not been reviewing for awhile my computer broke but anyways this is spectacular have a good good spring and as always keep writing and stay safe have a good monday also maybe next time you should make a sonnet
sincerely Greyson ernst
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I was wondering where you disappeared to. Glad that you're back and I thank you for this exceptional review. Have a wonderful day. :)
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
This is really lovely!
The theme of enduring love is delightful and the scene you paint of the picnic is both sweet and comedic at the same time (the ants, the dark clouds, the grill that refuses to light!)
You have successfully used all the required words, and they blend in beautifully to the rest of the poem - no shoe-horning whatsoever!
Perfect rhyme and meter. Well written and presented.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Hello :)
This is really lovely!
The theme of enduring love is delightful and the scene you paint of the picnic is both sweet and comedic at the same time (the ants, the dark clouds, the grill that refuses to light!)
You have successfully used all the required words, and they blend in beautifully to the rest of the poem - no shoe-horning whatsoever!
Perfect rhyme and meter. Well written and presented.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this nice review..I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Mary Furlong
Congratulations. You managed to use all of the words and make sense of them. When I read the contest description, I couldn't imagine how the words could make much of a poem. You proved it can be done. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Congratulations. You managed to use all of the words and make sense of them. When I read the contest description, I couldn't imagine how the words could make much of a poem. You proved it can be done. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem.I was a little unsure as well, but I like these contests, so I gave it a try. Thanks again for reading.:)
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
"As fireflies, like beacons light our way." This is my favorite line. You used the words beautifully, so well that I would never have known it was a prompt.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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"As fireflies, like beacons light our way." This is my favorite line. You used the words beautifully, so well that I would never have known it was a prompt.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review...it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from samandlancelot
You used your required words naturally. I like the photo you paired with your poem. I like the way you used sunset, and that after many years, your love still lifts your hearts.
Nice.
Patricia
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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You used your required words naturally. I like the photo you paired with your poem. I like the way you used sunset, and that after many years, your love still lifts your hearts.
Nice.
Patricia
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thanks so much for this nice review. :)
