Ode to My Chair
My captains chair served me well for years until it broke24 total reviews
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
Oh my goodness. This poem had me in stitches. How you are able to combine eloquence with hilarity is beyond me--what a gift you have! I thought the poem started out quite strong, was weaker in the middle, and ended strong. I think you should strengthen some of the middle parts (e.g., Stanza 6 that starts, "You know my dear chair"...and Stanza 7 that starts, "It's true chair, I'm cheap"). You are 95% the way "there" with your dear old chair poem. Great job and good luck with the contest! :)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Oh my goodness. This poem had me in stitches. How you are able to combine eloquence with hilarity is beyond me--what a gift you have! I thought the poem started out quite strong, was weaker in the middle, and ended strong. I think you should strengthen some of the middle parts (e.g., Stanza 6 that starts, "You know my dear chair"...and Stanza 7 that starts, "It's true chair, I'm cheap"). You are 95% the way "there" with your dear old chair poem. Great job and good luck with the contest! :)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much for the kind review. I'll take a look at the poem again. Have a great day.
Tom
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is very amusing and I am still laughing, I thoroughly enjoyed your jaunt with your old chair and how it struggled to survive, how useful it used to be and how you made your fond farewell when it died, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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This is very amusing and I am still laughing, I thoroughly enjoyed your jaunt with your old chair and how it struggled to survive, how useful it used to be and how you made your fond farewell when it died, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thank you Dolly. I'm glad it brought you a laugh or two. I've been blessed with a sense of humor, and it's always fun to share. Blessings
Tom
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Cute poem! EXCELLENT piece;-) Your skills are amazing to write a poem like that!
Thank you so much for sharing your awesome work and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Cute poem! EXCELLENT piece;-) Your skills are amazing to write a poem like that!
Thank you so much for sharing your awesome work and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Hello Melodie,
Thanks for the review and for the blessing especially. Don't we all need that right now? May the Lord bless you and yours as well.
Tom
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Thank you and yes we do!
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Comment from kahpot
A story filled with sentiment, I would like to see your stanzas levelled out a bit- consistent in lines and syllables, a wonderful journey through the life of this chair, I can see why it may not have been suitable on the boat, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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A story filled with sentiment, I would like to see your stanzas levelled out a bit- consistent in lines and syllables, a wonderful journey through the life of this chair, I can see why it may not have been suitable on the boat, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review kahpot. Yes, the chair just wouldn't work any more, much to my disappointment. Have a wonderful day.
Tom
Comment from Pantygynt
This is what odes are for, to sing the praises of beloved objects like Grecian Urns and Old Chairs.
Here's a thought. Fit your seat with a hinge and then oil it.
Cut a hole in the middle. I am sure that won't spoil it
It would then keep you comfy when sat on the toilet.
On such legs as remain you could thread toilet rolls
For the use of yourself and those other poor souls
caught out and caught short. They would thank you, old chap,
for providing a comfortable seat for a crap.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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This is what odes are for, to sing the praises of beloved objects like Grecian Urns and Old Chairs.
Here's a thought. Fit your seat with a hinge and then oil it.
Cut a hole in the middle. I am sure that won't spoil it
It would then keep you comfy when sat on the toilet.
On such legs as remain you could thread toilet rolls
For the use of yourself and those other poor souls
caught out and caught short. They would thank you, old chap,
for providing a comfortable seat for a crap.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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You have me laughing so hard right now. What a sharp mind. I'm so pleased to be on this site and get exposed to such wit. Thank you so much for the review and the wonderful extension of the poem. Have a great day!
Tom
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You are most welcome
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I found this poem absolutely entertaining and was giggling through each line I read. You cleverly expressed the emotional attachment between you and the chair. Love the photo of the beat-up chair. A most wonderful contest entry.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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I found this poem absolutely entertaining and was giggling through each line I read. You cleverly expressed the emotional attachment between you and the chair. Love the photo of the beat-up chair. A most wonderful contest entry.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much for the kind review. I loved that chair. It was the right height to see out the boat window and if I came in and sat down on it with fish slime or blood, it wouldn't matter. It's funny how we get attached to inanimate objects. Thanks again. Have a blessed day.
Tom
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And, I have 10+ year old shirts with holes in them I still wear and will not let go of.
Comment from royowen
Such a lovely poem, and a ballad dedicated to an old chair, though beaten iirs fair, I read it o my wife and she chortled with glee, but she did nearly pee, thaennshe declared..."excuse me." Beautifully written, rhymed and with such flair. Well done, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Such a lovely poem, and a ballad dedicated to an old chair, though beaten iirs fair, I read it o my wife and she chortled with glee, but she did nearly pee, thaennshe declared..."excuse me." Beautifully written, rhymed and with such flair. Well done, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thanks so much Roy. I'm not a poet, but the whole incident with the chair somehow came together for me. Blessings to you as well.
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Well done
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Delightful whimsy--so witty and clever, rife with wry humor and jaunty rhyme--if this doesn't get a prize I'll be PISSED. Perfect pic for the theme!
sewn=>sown
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Delightful whimsy--so witty and clever, rife with wry humor and jaunty rhyme--if this doesn't get a prize I'll be PISSED. Perfect pic for the theme!
sewn=>sown
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thanks again Elizabeth, you're on a roll. I can only hope that the stories will get more exposure. I appreciate your input gal.
Tom
Comment from Susan Newell
Great ode to an old friend, while you lament that all things deteriorate over time. The chair could be a metaphor for our reluctance to give up the comfortable in favor of the "new." I hope your son-in-law can work some magic on your comfortable old friend.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Great ode to an old friend, while you lament that all things deteriorate over time. The chair could be a metaphor for our reluctance to give up the comfortable in favor of the "new." I hope your son-in-law can work some magic on your comfortable old friend.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hi Susan-
Thanks for commenting. It's kind of foolish I guess to put so much value on an inanimate object, but I know what I like and it seems like replacements are never as good.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Ode to My Chair brings the reader through this back-sided affair with the long living chair which sadly had to finally give up its seat.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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This Ode to My Chair brings the reader through this back-sided affair with the long living chair which sadly had to finally give up its seat.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Hi Bill-
Thanks for commenting in such a hilarious manner. You're a bit of a pun master I see. Best wishes!
Tom
