Camellias bloom
blank verse40 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
JMF4119:
I understand how we have an idea about what we want to write and then our muse will take it somewhere else. I have learned to allow my muse to take the lead whenever that occurs. I love the picture you selected to go with this piece.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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JMF4119:
I understand how we have an idea about what we want to write and then our muse will take it somewhere else. I have learned to allow my muse to take the lead whenever that occurs. I love the picture you selected to go with this piece.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from rspoet
Hello Janet,
A marvelous blank verse poem with wonderful imagery
and use of sound in the assonance and alliteration.
The iambic pentameter reads perfectly.
Sometimes, a poem just has a mind of its own,
and knows exactly where it wants to go. :)
Beautiful verse.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Hello Janet,
A marvelous blank verse poem with wonderful imagery
and use of sound in the assonance and alliteration.
The iambic pentameter reads perfectly.
Sometimes, a poem just has a mind of its own,
and knows exactly where it wants to go. :)
Beautiful verse.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thank you Robert for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the extra special sixth star. You're right, sometimes, a poem just has a mind of its own.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from harmony13
This poem is filled with uplifting words. I found these words interesting,
lovely, descriptive and creative. The poem flows and connects well. I really enjoyed the last stanza. The artwork is perfect and compliments these words.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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This poem is filled with uplifting words. I found these words interesting,
lovely, descriptive and creative. The poem flows and connects well. I really enjoyed the last stanza. The artwork is perfect and compliments these words.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Allieas
Your words brought us on a beautiful journey with you. Thank you so much for sharing this. I love when we start writing thinking that the work is going to go in one direction and then it guides us into another one entirely! Thanks again for this, and happy writing :)
Alexandra
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Your words brought us on a beautiful journey with you. Thank you so much for sharing this. I love when we start writing thinking that the work is going to go in one direction and then it guides us into another one entirely! Thanks again for this, and happy writing :)
Alexandra
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you Alexandra for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from QC Poet
Camilla's are one of the flowers that remind me of my youth also. As a preteen and teen my father was a Landscape Gardener. Each time I get close enough to smell certain flower's scent I'm reminded of my dad. Thank you for Sharing your poem and the photo. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Camilla's are one of the flowers that remind me of my youth also. As a preteen and teen my father was a Landscape Gardener. Each time I get close enough to smell certain flower's scent I'm reminded of my dad. Thank you for Sharing your poem and the photo. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. I'm glad it brought back good memories.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jesse James Doty
How right you are that this goes in one direction, then another, and then another, and then the last verse seems to come from a different poem altogether. Does the cricket whisper your name as you fall asleep? Or does the narrator, or does the one who sires the baby boy? This sounds lovely but leaves a lot of questions in my mind.
Thank you for sharing.
Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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How right you are that this goes in one direction, then another, and then another, and then the last verse seems to come from a different poem altogether. Does the cricket whisper your name as you fall asleep? Or does the narrator, or does the one who sires the baby boy? This sounds lovely but leaves a lot of questions in my mind.
Thank you for sharing.
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you Jesse for your thoughtful review. This is a fictional poem, so the reader can choose whatever he would like it to be.
Blessings
Janet
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Hello Janet.
I agree that fiction can be whatever we want it to be, but it was still a little confusing, sorry to say.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Janet, glad I had a six left for you. This blank verse is so well written in good iambic pentameter that the reader does not notice there is no rhyme. Exactly how a blank verse should sound. Beautifully worded - a pure love song. I know what you mean about changing tack when writing a poem. It seems the words flow without your bidding - they usually turn out the best kind. Lovely work - Love Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Hello Janet, glad I had a six left for you. This blank verse is so well written in good iambic pentameter that the reader does not notice there is no rhyme. Exactly how a blank verse should sound. Beautifully worded - a pure love song. I know what you mean about changing tack when writing a poem. It seems the words flow without your bidding - they usually turn out the best kind. Lovely work - Love Dorothy xx
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and I'm happy you had a six left too. I'm just trying out blank verse and I think I like it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sharon Davis
The imagery in this poem has the reader walking and remembering right along with you. Very moving. Your choice of a bright background ties in with the happy memories you explore.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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The imagery in this poem has the reader walking and remembering right along with you. Very moving. Your choice of a bright background ties in with the happy memories you explore.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you Sharon for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Janice Canerdy
SO glad I have a 6 to give this wonderful poem! I love blank verse done right--and yours certainly is! It flows like a lovely river, with vivid, specific details about nature and love.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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SO glad I have a 6 to give this wonderful poem! I love blank verse done right--and yours certainly is! It flows like a lovely river, with vivid, specific details about nature and love.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thank you Janice for your thoughtful and encouraging review. And thank you for the 6. I'm so glad you had one left too and I'm so pleased that you liked this one. :))))
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
You took us through a lifetime in your lovely blank verse poem. It starts with the blossom of love in the spring with camellias and then it continues with the spring of life again with the birth of a child and the lullaby. I see where this poem transitioned then to bring us to a realization that the narrator's beloved is gone and is fondly remembered through the many springs and the night sky.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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You took us through a lifetime in your lovely blank verse poem. It starts with the blossom of love in the spring with camellias and then it continues with the spring of life again with the birth of a child and the lullaby. I see where this poem transitioned then to bring us to a realization that the narrator's beloved is gone and is fondly remembered through the many springs and the night sky.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm glad you could see the transition. It was surprising to me when the mood and tone changed.
Blessings
Janet
