Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Football Chapter 12 part 3"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from eliz100
Another great post. I think you handled the "girly magazine" very well. The flow is great, as always.I continue to enjoy your use of space and the font you chosee.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Another great post. I think you handled the "girly magazine" very well. The flow is great, as always.I continue to enjoy your use of space and the font you chosee.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-That is quite an image, Barbara.
-I wasn't expecting the direction
the story went so good job on that!
-It was a good chapter showing
how kids can be a part of something
and feeling grown up about it,
but then learn from someone they
respect, that it wasn't a good choice to make.
-The family respects Gabe, and they
are okay with him being with their mom.
-It was also a very good message that
Gabe left him with about how his
younger brother could be influenced
if he were to have seen the magazine.
-I like the way you handled it.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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-That is quite an image, Barbara.
-I wasn't expecting the direction
the story went so good job on that!
-It was a good chapter showing
how kids can be a part of something
and feeling grown up about it,
but then learn from someone they
respect, that it wasn't a good choice to make.
-The family respects Gabe, and they
are okay with him being with their mom.
-It was also a very good message that
Gabe left him with about how his
younger brother could be influenced
if he were to have seen the magazine.
-I like the way you handled it.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding. I can promise you this will come up again. There's a reason it's in the story.
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You are very welcome, and thanks for sharing.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Gabe got a closer to the boys and now have a chance to to interfere in their education and gain their trust. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Gabe got a closer to the boys and now have a chance to to interfere in their education and gain their trust. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the story. It reminds me of my boy. He was late coming home after school. I asked him where he was. He was honest to tell me he was at the book store reading girlie magazines...
I like your story and the conversations between Joshua and Gabriel.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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I like the story. It reminds me of my boy. He was late coming home after school. I asked him where he was. He was honest to tell me he was at the book store reading girlie magazines...
I like your story and the conversations between Joshua and Gabriel.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
It sounds like Gabriel is a decent guy and Katherine's mom must be hoing they will get together. He handled the magazine thing will. I can see him being willing to not tell Katherine in order to get closer to the Jordon. I guess Katherine doesn't need to know, but she probably doesn't like things being kept from her.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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It sounds like Gabriel is a decent guy and Katherine's mom must be hoing they will get together. He handled the magazine thing will. I can see him being willing to not tell Katherine in order to get closer to the Jordon. I guess Katherine doesn't need to know, but she probably doesn't like things being kept from her.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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No mother likes being kept in the dark, but I think she understands when it comes to boys, there are things Mom should stay out of. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear barbara, I see some good fathering in this chapter, so I hope Katherine will find someway to let Gabe work with her boys, Even if she wants to keep away from a relationship herself.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Dear barbara, I see some good fathering in this chapter, so I hope Katherine will find someway to let Gabe work with her boys, Even if she wants to keep away from a relationship herself.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from royowen
Gabriel's becoming the custodian of the boy's moral behaviour, and a man who knows what mistakes he's made and can set a moral example to young, hormonal boys. Katherine's mum knows her daughter, and gives her some unwanted advice. Beautifully written Barbara, a super episode, blessings Roy
Typo : They were his big brother(')s
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Gabriel's becoming the custodian of the boy's moral behaviour, and a man who knows what mistakes he's made and can set a moral example to young, hormonal boys. Katherine's mum knows her daughter, and gives her some unwanted advice. Beautifully written Barbara, a super episode, blessings Roy
Typo : They were his big brother(')s
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
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Most welcome
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My pleasure
Comment from Sankey
You never disappoint in your writing. I am so glad to have you and a few others in FS as my favourite writers. I am definitely more into prose than poetry. Well done again and not a spag anywhere!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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You never disappoint in your writing. I am so glad to have you and a few others in FS as my favourite writers. I am definitely more into prose than poetry. Well done again and not a spag anywhere!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and liking prose. Many people like the poetry because it's shorter.
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Hate those short poems that still need a lot of wind in review hehe.
Comment from Jay Squires
I like the way this is developing, Barbara.
his big brothers. [...his big brother's (magazine).]
Gabriel shoved it inside a sports-bag. "I'll destroy it at my place." [Unless ... someone finds it first!]
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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I like the way this is developing, Barbara.
his big brothers. [...his big brother's (magazine).]
Gabriel shoved it inside a sports-bag. "I'll destroy it at my place." [Unless ... someone finds it first!]
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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I had to wait to answer your review until I had a chance to make the correction. It's done. Thank you for the catch. The Playboy Magazine comes back to haunt Gabriel, much later. LOL
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Nicely handled. Sounds like he is getting better and better at figuring out what a woman really wants. He's definitely what she needs. Now she just needs to figure that out. haha Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Barb,
Nicely handled. Sounds like he is getting better and better at figuring out what a woman really wants. He's definitely what she needs. Now she just needs to figure that out. haha Thanks!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
