Loss of Innocence
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
victortouche:
Is it a pun for me to say "touche'?" I love this free verse poem you have written about the heart of what is wrong in our country right now - not enough work available for the people who want to work. I was born in 51 and I get what you're saying.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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victortouche:
Is it a pun for me to say "touche'?" I love this free verse poem you have written about the heart of what is wrong in our country right now - not enough work available for the people who want to work. I was born in 51 and I get what you're saying.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate it.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a very good rallying composition. It is truly the basis of growth.
Encouragement goes a long way toward awareness and meaningful endeavor. Nicely done.
Ralf
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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This is a very good rallying composition. It is truly the basis of growth.
Encouragement goes a long way toward awareness and meaningful endeavor. Nicely done.
Ralf
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Smiling, thank you.
Comment from Janet Foor
You make excellent points in this free verse poem. I that "pride" is a problem for our people. "Pride goeth before destruction, and an haughty spirit before a fall". Proverbs 16:18. Personally, I think we are in trouble.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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You make excellent points in this free verse poem. I that "pride" is a problem for our people. "Pride goeth before destruction, and an haughty spirit before a fall". Proverbs 16:18. Personally, I think we are in trouble.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Janet.
And thanks for following me.
Doug
Comment from dmt1967
This poem suited the picture and I enjoyed reading the words. I really think the motto is well timed as well and liked the essence of this poem. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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This poem suited the picture and I enjoyed reading the words. I really think the motto is well timed as well and liked the essence of this poem. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you for reading it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your thoughtful and thought-provoking free vere poem speaks movingly of how we grow up taught to have certain expectations of life--of people. Sometimes reality hits hard.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Your thoughtful and thought-provoking free vere poem speaks movingly of how we grow up taught to have certain expectations of life--of people. Sometimes reality hits hard.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from QC Poet
It's true that money and jobs are valuable commodities today as always but give to Ceasar that which is Ceasar 's and to God that which is God's is what I strive to do and show my grandkids. Blessings and Thanks for Sharing your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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It's true that money and jobs are valuable commodities today as always but give to Ceasar that which is Ceasar 's and to God that which is God's is what I strive to do and show my grandkids. Blessings and Thanks for Sharing your poem.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, many have lost their way, and have given up. Your poem makes several valid points about work, family, attitude, and perseverance. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Yes, many have lost their way, and have given up. Your poem makes several valid points about work, family, attitude, and perseverance. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Jan.
Comment from robyn corum
Victor,
I agree. Really well said. This is nice and simple. Point A to Point B without stopping and without nonsense. I like that style quite a lot.
The only question I have is re the last line.
*Come on people,
try-
yet once again.
--> consider using 'once' or 'yet' but perhaps not both?
Still a great message and nicely presented! Thank you!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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Victor,
I agree. Really well said. This is nice and simple. Point A to Point B without stopping and without nonsense. I like that style quite a lot.
The only question I have is re the last line.
*Come on people,
try-
yet once again.
--> consider using 'once' or 'yet' but perhaps not both?
Still a great message and nicely presented! Thank you!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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I think ur right.
I will change it.
Thank you.
U should feel priviledged.
I seldom take advice.
Lol
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Hahahs
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good choice of image, Doug.
-I like your poem very much.
-You say a lot with a few words,
and I applaud you for it.
-I like how you have it in
sections, beginning with
older generations and
the groundwork they laid.
-It took hard work, not
focusing on the "I" and you are
right about doing that:
"kills the dream.
Kills our country."
-Perfect concluding lines.
-I think this is one of
your best poems, and
I happen to share your view.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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-A good choice of image, Doug.
-I like your poem very much.
-You say a lot with a few words,
and I applaud you for it.
-I like how you have it in
sections, beginning with
older generations and
the groundwork they laid.
-It took hard work, not
focusing on the "I" and you are
right about doing that:
"kills the dream.
Kills our country."
-Perfect concluding lines.
-I think this is one of
your best poems, and
I happen to share your view.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Pam.
Doug
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You are welcome, Doug.
Comment from royowen
Faith in either people, or country both, are a foolish errand, your country is comprised of people as is any country, and if pride teaches us only one thing, thst it is foolhardy to trust either, your people are suffering because of pride. As did other great civilisations. It does have a solution, but pride needs to be dealt with. Beautifully written Doug, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Faith in either people, or country both, are a foolish errand, your country is comprised of people as is any country, and if pride teaches us only one thing, thst it is foolhardy to trust either, your people are suffering because of pride. As did other great civilisations. It does have a solution, but pride needs to be dealt with. Beautifully written Doug, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Can't argue with you, Roy.
Thank you,
Doug
