Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

Overall, this poem is a delight. So much longing running through it is very effective. Just one line lets you down:
my hope, you drown at your side
The sense isn't there, and it seems to be a syllable short. Certainly it breaks the flow.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021

Thank you very much, I understand about the line but not the syllable count, the prompt did not require one, thank you for the understanding in your comments

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

This is a very well- written poem, expressing a desire for needed freedom from unmentioned abuse. The longing to live, and indeed be one's real self is poignant. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

This is a well put together presentation for the Quatrain poetry contest. Your picture choice is lovely and definitely speaks to the theme of your writing.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your skillfully-written, moving poem vividly describes a person practically imprisoned by an abusive person who demeans and dehumanizes. the last stanza provides escape.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

Comment from Trish Wilson

Excellent

Oh my heart. A beautiful testimony of a woman that's learning to stand and heal on her own. My favorite is: "...I'll fly till fully grown I long to be I long for me". Just beautiful.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021

Thank you so very much, a wonderful review

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Hello Mysterious Poet,

I think you have done an outstanding job on your quatrain entry!
Your theme is interesting and presented in well rhymed abab form.

This stanza stood out to me:

"your mind descends as fists ascend
I long to leave I long to hide
my teary eyes that never end
among the ripples you provide"

I enjoyed reading your talented work
and wish you best in the contest.

Anna

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

reply by AnnaLinda on 13-Mar-2021

Welcome

reply by AnnaLinda on 13-Mar-2021

Welcome

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a nicely written poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. It has Nice background colour and font. Very nice photo selection as well to compliment your poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

If we are in ill heal, all we yearn for is to be well and be ourselves again and this is why I celebrate my days when I feel in good health, something we must appreciate. A melancholy write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thank you very much

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Your poem rhymes well. You deserve the credits.

I like the title; "I long."

I like the poem says:'
I long to heal; I long to hide; I long to live; I long for me..."

An excellent poem
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thank you so very much

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I love this stanza;'I'll walk with pride I will be known
with name that's mine so visibly
unweighted I'll fly 'till fully grown
I long to be I long for me" It's good to be yourself again and to be able to be true to your calling:)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thank you so very much