Haiku (winter's frigid grip)
A Haiku Poem20 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Kahpot,
This is a really fantastic poem, even more so to me because it's in the thirties outside with a downcast sky.
I would like to give our winters an indefinite pink slip and get more healthily sun.
(I got this idea from your last line!)
Good luck in the contest, Kahpot!
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Kahpot,
This is a really fantastic poem, even more so to me because it's in the thirties outside with a downcast sky.
I would like to give our winters an indefinite pink slip and get more healthily sun.
(I got this idea from your last line!)
Good luck in the contest, Kahpot!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much Cindy, yes more healthy sun sounds good to me, as always much appreciated****kahpot
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Kahpot, I couldn?t find your poem on the contest voting form. ?
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I think this was a site entry
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture... It shows spring is coming as the fruits are on your way...
As much as I like four seasons, this winter is too long. It is time to send it away and welcome spring,
Thanks for sharing this poem...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I like the picture... It shows spring is coming as the fruits are on your way...
As much as I like four seasons, this winter is too long. It is time to send it away and welcome spring,
Thanks for sharing this poem...
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, kahpot.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You show the impact of
"winter's frigid grip," and I
like the satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, kahpot.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You show the impact of
"winter's frigid grip," and I
like the satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your excellent comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot, it is good to see you on FS. Hope you are doing well.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Haiku (winter's frigid grip)
by kahpot
Hello, Kym,
Great job with the entry for the Haiku contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the satori (last line)... it's clever. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Haiku (winter's frigid grip)
by kahpot
Hello, Kym,
Great job with the entry for the Haiku contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the satori (last line)... it's clever. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your encouraging comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Sugarray77
You have made excellent use of unique words and phrases to showcase both nature and the postal system. A clever blend of meanings and inferences. Well done, Kahpot.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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You have made excellent use of unique words and phrases to showcase both nature and the postal system. A clever blend of meanings and inferences. Well done, Kahpot.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Wow! thank you for your exceptional review and six stars, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your haiku. I like the colored changes of font. Great job with the haiku style. I like the use of the words journals and sender. Your picture is supportive. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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You did a great job with your haiku. I like the colored changes of font. Great job with the haiku style. I like the use of the words journals and sender. Your picture is supportive. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from dragonpoet
NIcely done haiku. Yes we are all waiting for Winter to turn to Spring.
I like the background being the color of a spring sky and that you use greeen and white font colors to portray the fitting season.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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NIcely done haiku. Yes we are all waiting for Winter to turn to Spring.
I like the background being the color of a spring sky and that you use greeen and white font colors to portray the fitting season.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Yes bring it on, Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Don't mention it, Kahpot.
Joan
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear kapot, I am so glad that you now have a mentor, who is helping you learn new forms. You have crafted here a perfect Haku.
All you need to do now is to explain to me, (because I am rather slow) your meaning.
I also needed to ask, why you selected an apple, for your illustration?
P.S. one other thing you need to know is that no word in a kailu, is allowed to be capitalized so remove the capital W from your first word, please.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Dear kapot, I am so glad that you now have a mentor, who is helping you learn new forms. You have crafted here a perfect Haku.
All you need to do now is to explain to me, (because I am rather slow) your meaning.
I also needed to ask, why you selected an apple, for your illustration?
P.S. one other thing you need to know is that no word in a kailu, is allowed to be capitalized so remove the capital W from your first word, please.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, I will try to explain the apple, I was not focused on the apple more so the image of warm returning to cold or visy versy, thanks for the heads up about the capitols very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
You have mastered this form beautifully! I like the imagery of winter being a bully and trying to return spring's beauty to sender. But it won't succeed. Seeds sown will grow and blossom into next year's bounty. Perfect artwork as well.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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You have mastered this form beautifully! I like the imagery of winter being a bully and trying to return spring's beauty to sender. But it won't succeed. Seeds sown will grow and blossom into next year's bounty. Perfect artwork as well.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you, next years bounty-I like that image, as always your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from AnnaLinda
Kahpot,
Wow! You nailed this haiku! I'm glad someone had a 6th star to offer this
beauty on a Saturday! You have really made a bold presentation for your
masterful haiku. Cute satori and I like how you incorporated 'envelopes'
'brief' 'journals' and then "return to sender" while still making that battle of the seasons really clear.
Super duper!
Anna
(nice of you to mention me:)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Kahpot,
Wow! You nailed this haiku! I'm glad someone had a 6th star to offer this
beauty on a Saturday! You have really made a bold presentation for your
masterful haiku. Cute satori and I like how you incorporated 'envelopes'
'brief' 'journals' and then "return to sender" while still making that battle of the seasons really clear.
Super duper!
Anna
(nice of you to mention me:)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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You deserve a mention, Many thanks for your wonderful comments, with help I think I can understand this form a lot better, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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It's Gorgeous!
