The Foolish Boy
This is how a young boy got saved from demons5 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love the grand finale and just to all:) "l to the floor in his room and bowed to the all mighty God in Heaven, as he trembled with fear he yelled "God! I can't do this any longer, forgive me Lord for I hath sinned greatly and disrespected you for I need you as my savior!", his father rushed in Issacs room and found him drenched in tears bowing to the Lord, for his his repentance was on that very day. As Issac arose from the floor he hugged his father and began an apology for not taking God seriously, and telling him that he was truly an excellent father." Thank you for sharing an good luck with the contest.
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I love the grand finale and just to all:) "l to the floor in his room and bowed to the all mighty God in Heaven, as he trembled with fear he yelled "God! I can't do this any longer, forgive me Lord for I hath sinned greatly and disrespected you for I need you as my savior!", his father rushed in Issacs room and found him drenched in tears bowing to the Lord, for his his repentance was on that very day. As Issac arose from the floor he hugged his father and began an apology for not taking God seriously, and telling him that he was truly an excellent father." Thank you for sharing an good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
Comment from royowen
It's true that sometimes thst God will allow spiritual attacks to reveal that if we will release ourselves into His loving care He will provide a hedge against spiritual attack from an uncaring enemy.
Just a suggestion, you'll need to be more diligent in your editing of work, but well done, blessings Roy
Typo :Father(s) was a pastor. 2: What he (has) done. Had? 3 : and he pondered(,) thinking(,) 4 : now this (proceeds) proceeded? 5 : For his (his) repentance.
6: God saved him(e) from so very much.
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It's true that sometimes thst God will allow spiritual attacks to reveal that if we will release ourselves into His loving care He will provide a hedge against spiritual attack from an uncaring enemy.
Just a suggestion, you'll need to be more diligent in your editing of work, but well done, blessings Roy
Typo :Father(s) was a pastor. 2: What he (has) done. Had? 3 : and he pondered(,) thinking(,) 4 : now this (proceeds) proceeded? 5 : For his (his) repentance.
6: God saved him(e) from so very much.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
Comment from dmt1967
For one, I would not make this one paragraph. It hurt my eyes and I reread a line three times before I realised it. The second, even if this is a children's tale, it needs to keep the reader entertained. In other words, it needs to show. I think this could be a great story but, in my opinion, it needs work. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
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For one, I would not make this one paragraph. It hurt my eyes and I reread a line three times before I realised it. The second, even if this is a children's tale, it needs to keep the reader entertained. In other words, it needs to show. I think this could be a great story but, in my opinion, it needs work. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Terrifying--nightmares tonight--your fault! You certainly conveyed his torment and despair--I recall creepy stories about inadvertent invocation of demons using Ouija boards.
Isaacs=>ISAAC'S
fathers=>FATHER'S
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Terrifying--nightmares tonight--your fault! You certainly conveyed his torment and despair--I recall creepy stories about inadvertent invocation of demons using Ouija boards.
Isaacs=>ISAAC'S
fathers=>FATHER'S
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
Comment from DonandVicki
I wish there were more of these spiritual stories on this website. Yours is well composed and you created believable images with your words. i like the style and the Biblical references.
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I wish there were more of these spiritual stories on this website. Yours is well composed and you created believable images with your words. i like the style and the Biblical references.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
