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Apocalypse pt. 4

self love

17 total reviews 
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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This is an exceptional apocalyptic poem. I like your visions of churches in one times, though I hope that's not the way things will be.
You've written a very creative poem.
Best wishes,
Good luck in the contest,
Cindy

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
    Thanks again for the six stars and your support for my apocalyptic vision. I am glad you found it so compelling. estory
Comment from royowen
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I must admit, I'm not really possession oriented, even in my pre Christian days, it makes me a careless person pondering on the appearance of my car, but weaknesses are an ever present part of human existence, this is one of the many human maladies, but they were around in Jesus' time, perhaps the cavemen envied their neighbour's dwelling? Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and for all the continued support and interest in my writing over the years. I am glad you enjoyed it, I like to make people think and I am glad it got you thinking. I have to say this series is proving more popular than I expected. But people have always been fascinated with the apocalypse. estory
reply by royowen on 15-Mar-2021
    Well done dear friend, you capture the essence of human existence well.
Comment from sandramitchell
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That is so true. You have just described the life of so many, and I'm sure they can't be happy. I've never had the luxury of such high sums of money, so I'll not know that sort of unhappiness. Money doesn't buy joy, but it can bring loneliness. Well done, this is a very thought-provoking poem. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your words of support for this piece. It was difficult to write, and I think difficult to read. Our society today has moved into this realm of self centeredness, away from God and nature, and is preoccupied with self gratification and superficial sensation. estory
reply by sandramitchell on 13-Mar-2021
    That is so true, though most would deny it, I'm afraid.
Comment from Wendy G
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You have written with insight and wisdom. there is something very shallow about our present lifestyle and priorities, unless we make it our goal to refute this garbage, and start living with the simple desire to support others in their life journey. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks so much for the excellent review and sharing your words of support for this piece. I think you got what I was trying to say here, and I will be glad if it gets people thinking. In many ways, its a condemnation of many things in my own life. We are all guilty of falling into this trap so propogated by society today. estory
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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The title doesn't let on how magnificent this essay is. I suppose it is our little secret, mine and the rest of your readers who know how well you write and the truth your words speak. I am so glad I fanned you and clicked this one, and I will bookcase this one to save and show it to my friends. I love the reference to watching the stock market tickets rising versus the sun rising. I prefer a beautiful sunrise any time my friend. All the examples are poignant and so true and the ending is quiet and sober and well planned. Unlike so many that start well and finish with a whimper, yours ends as it should...with the narrator all alone and shutting the door to the world. I consume less and less and find happiness more often as I go through each day. More power to you, my friend!
Jesse

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks again for the wonderful support and your words of sympathy for what I had to say here. Write on! estory
reply by Jesse James Doty on 13-Mar-2021
    You are so welcome!
    I just showed a friend your post and he loved it! So true and so real!
    Jesse
Comment from Ulla
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Absolutely,estory, you make it so clear in this wonderful poem. Far to many think that they can buy themselves through life and find happiness. only to find that they are as unhappy as they'd ever been. True happiness can only be found through interaction with people you like or love. A simple truth. I loved your poem. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and for your words of support for this piece. I think you got what I was trying to say here about the self centered focus of today's society. We, me included, sometimes get obsessed with superficial gratification and self appreciation and it takes us away from God and nature. estory
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Very clever poem, kind of let me tell you about the world today, and after all the bad and the ugly your ending calms down the spirits like nothing happened: "We wake up with a hangover.

We look in the mirror.

We turn out the light
and close the door.
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and your words of support for this piece. its always nice to hear specifically what works in a poem, and you did that for me here. I appreciate all the support, my friend. estory
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Your poem, delineating how some lives are spent, paints the world with a broad brush. There are others who are not into those particular ins and outs, who do live meaningfully. The indication is that we are all going to Hell in a basket. Not so! I'm sure you are aware of this and you are simply flagging those who will resonate with your words and hopefully amend their ways. I like this...

"We spend our time listening to commercials
advertising cereal, cars, or pharmaceuticals.
We watch the ticker tape of the shares rising
instead of the sun in the early morning."

Ralf

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and for your perspective on the piece, and its always nice to hear specifically what works, and you did that for me here. I painted society with a broad brush including myself in it, because we ARE all going to hell, without the grace and mercy of Jesus Christ. None of us can reach heaven on our own, including me. estory
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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Times change. And how! WE live in an age of consumerism and the younger generation are living as if there is no tomorrow. You have very nicely described it is a simple poetic style. I enjoyed reading it. The problem with consumerism is that people buy or eat things that have the least value for them! Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful words of support for this piece. I am glad it resonated with you and got you thinking and that's what I like to do with my writing. I read an article today in the Wall Street Journal about sex robots and that to me, sums up this movement into self gratification and self appreciation which takes us away from God and nature. estory
Comment from Lyn Peters
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Interesting observations, estory. I was struck by the end (that, we turn out the light before closing the door) and couldn't help but wonder if turning the light out indicates that there is some hope (do we turn the light out to save energy or because we prefer to cast our selfishness into darkness). Thanks for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
    Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the piece, including mentioning that specific moment in it. Actually I wanted to create a sense of all encompassing darkness here, of despair, of total isolation, in this part of the series. Later in the course of it, it will gradually move into the light. estory