Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words are interesting, a reminder and are creative. I hardly
ever think of pulse! I pondered on my pulse and it's rate. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork is eccentric and compliments these words
well. Hope you are having a great day!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021

Thank you for your feedback :)
Bsst wishes, Debra

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Debra,

I would not have thought this was a first attempt at senyru. You've definitely nailed it...in my opinion.

Rhythm, tempo, beat all placed together well...creating an experience. Your twig artwork enhances the experience.

Very well done,
Anna

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Anna, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A wise write as when we don't feel the beat, we miss out on life. A magical photo here which has no doubt inspired you to write these uplifting words Debra, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Dolly :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork and
presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a good senyru
with a good topic and
syllable count.
-I like the theme of
rhythm in the poem,
and the description of
how it changes.
-A good concluding line
that has a good message
without stating it directly.
-Very well done!

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you, Pam for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

reply by Pam (respa) on 10-Mar-2021

You are very welcome, Debra.

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

Our biological rhythms are always in tune with nature. We need to listen to it carefully and follow the beat for a balanced life. Interesting poem. Interesting theme. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Debra, This is a very nice and well written senyru poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Teri :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

The brilliant title supports the theme--a concise and clever summary of the familiar phrases: life is unpredictable--gotta go with the flow--be mindful.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Liz :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Love the tree twig artwork, and what a powerful senryu you have written here, Debra. Feel the beat, no matter which way the wind blows, because much that happens is uncontrollable, so go with the beat.

Your humour is subtle and works perfectly here IMO.

Thanks for sharing.

Gloria

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely feedback, Gloria :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Pulse
by Debra White

Hello, Debra,

Excellent entry for the Haiku Club Senryu challenge. Good syllables count and connection between lines. You are right about life changes. Thank you very much for participating.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your senryu is in good form, Debra, the illustration is perfect for your well thought out words. I like the way beat and rhythm go together. Your poem has a great message. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021

Thank you so much, Jan :)
Best wishes, Debra