Soulbond
a short story approx 900 words12 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Bill This is a six for me and have only caught up with it
Read it twice and thought well that was engaging and kept my interest
Good characters and theme Ivan / Kitty as one
Great ending
Congratulations on your win
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Hi Bill This is a six for me and have only caught up with it
Read it twice and thought well that was engaging and kept my interest
Good characters and theme Ivan / Kitty as one
Great ending
Congratulations on your win
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 26-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Chris, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from Judy Lawless
I love the context in which you've created this story in a story. You had me guessing for a while, and I'm disappointed with the sad ending, but it is what it is. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I love the context in which you've created this story in a story. You had me guessing for a while, and I'm disappointed with the sad ending, but it is what it is. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I vacillated on the ending, considering pulling a happy rabbit out of a hat. I seldom do.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I totally do not expect such an ending. It may be too brutal but everything can happen in this world.
As a writer sometimes the author can become one of the characters, and behave like one too.
Good writing skills. I'll vote for this one.
Good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I totally do not expect such an ending. It may be too brutal but everything can happen in this world.
As a writer sometimes the author can become one of the characters, and behave like one too.
Good writing skills. I'll vote for this one.
Good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Chan
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Such a Steven King story, and I liked every piece of it:""Things you SHOULD have done to help your own relationship, Dude -- but never did."
"I did them here, on paper, for this couple."
"No! You were going to repeat the same mistakes from your own life. You thought that projecting your pitiful experiences onto me would be cathartic. I stopped you and created a sea change that has won the day for Kevin and Kitty."
" Thank you for sharing and you got my vote.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Such a Steven King story, and I liked every piece of it:""Things you SHOULD have done to help your own relationship, Dude -- but never did."
"I did them here, on paper, for this couple."
"No! You were going to repeat the same mistakes from your own life. You thought that projecting your pitiful experiences onto me would be cathartic. I stopped you and created a sea change that has won the day for Kevin and Kitty."
" Thank you for sharing and you got my vote.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Iza
Comment from T B Botts
This was an interesting story. The ending was kind of dark, but you did post a warning. I liked the way it was written. You have a good imagination. I hope you continue on with your writing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This was an interesting story. The ending was kind of dark, but you did post a warning. I liked the way it was written. You have a good imagination. I hope you continue on with your writing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thanks, TB
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bill Scott
I will say you drew my attention of what soul bond meant
The one thing that I thought about soul bound was Ivan fell in love
with Kitty the computer and she (kitty the computer) went blank while Kitty some way caused Ivan to take his own life with an over dose of pills. Am I on the right track or on the wrong track?????
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Hello Bill Scott
I will say you drew my attention of what soul bond meant
The one thing that I thought about soul bound was Ivan fell in love
with Kitty the computer and she (kitty the computer) went blank while Kitty some way caused Ivan to take his own life with an over dose of pills. Am I on the right track or on the wrong track?????
Gert
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Kevin and Kitty were characters in Ivan's romance story. In his real life, Ivan had a bad relationship that ended poorly and ruined him. Kitty was successful where Ivan was not, but now he has been eclipsed by her character. He kills people who hurt him and wrote it into his final chapter as Kitty.
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Thank you Unknown writer for telling the meaning of your short story. Your story is well told. and the ending was quiet
a surprise.
Gert
gert
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Thank you Unknown writer for telling the meaning of your short story. Your story is well told. and the ending was quiet
a surprise.
Gert
gert
Comment from Rikki66
When one is writing fiction from life weird things can happen. I often find myself in similar situations as Ivan. My characters talk back, correcting my wandering thoughts. Good work.
RikkiLXVI
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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When one is writing fiction from life weird things can happen. I often find myself in similar situations as Ivan. My characters talk back, correcting my wandering thoughts. Good work.
RikkiLXVI
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Hope you haven't killed anybody.
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In war me or him.
Rikki
Comment from Leann DS
Well... That story was unique and creative. I don't really know what soulbond means, so this was my first taste of it. Your story kept my interest from beginning to end. I did not notice any errors in typing or grammar. I liked it. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Well... That story was unique and creative. I don't really know what soulbond means, so this was my first taste of it. Your story kept my interest from beginning to end. I did not notice any errors in typing or grammar. I liked it. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thanks, Leann. My understanding is when the author is so into the character that it takes on a discourse with him or her.
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Very interesting. I'm going to have to do some more research on that topic. Again, well done Story!
Comment from pome lover
well! That was quite a story. I like the way you portrayed what he did by putting it in the book. That was clever.(although I think he overdid his retaliation - yikes!) But that was a good premise- especially the heroine in the book talking him into taking revenge- a good interpretation of soulbond. Very good!
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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well! That was quite a story. I like the way you portrayed what he did by putting it in the book. That was clever.(although I think he overdid his retaliation - yikes!) But that was a good premise- especially the heroine in the book talking him into taking revenge- a good interpretation of soulbond. Very good!
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Katharine, for the excellent review.
Comment from DonandVicki
You have a way of pulling the reader in with the plot and dialogue. This story, short as it is really held me on edge. well written and I think and feel this will do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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You have a way of pulling the reader in with the plot and dialogue. This story, short as it is really held me on edge. well written and I think and feel this will do well in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thanks, DnV
