Love's mores
Flash Fiction16 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Zanya,
I enjoyed your flash fiction. You tell the story of true love, and a secret rendezvous, destroyed by murmurs of inheritance being cut off. I think the wealthy rarely married for love, but rather for land and position, for financial strength and security.
Well done in only 152 words. Lady Elise was so wrong when she told her mother, ' Papa cannot destroy our true love.' Indeed, money talks!
Good Luck in the contest! Your historical fiction writing wings are working fine.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Hi Zanya,
I enjoyed your flash fiction. You tell the story of true love, and a secret rendezvous, destroyed by murmurs of inheritance being cut off. I think the wealthy rarely married for love, but rather for land and position, for financial strength and security.
Well done in only 152 words. Lady Elise was so wrong when she told her mother, ' Papa cannot destroy our true love.' Indeed, money talks!
Good Luck in the contest! Your historical fiction writing wings are working fine.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw - thanks for those encourging words zanya
Comment from Judy Lawless
Great "short" story! You've said so much using so few words. It sums up how men usually ruled the lives of others, especially women, by holding tightly to the purse strings, but it was a surprise ending.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great "short" story! You've said so much using so few words. It sums up how men usually ruled the lives of others, especially women, by holding tightly to the purse strings, but it was a surprise ending.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, the decisions a young noblewoman of those times had to make: love or comfortable life? You did a great job of setting the scene and telling the story in so few words. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Oh, the decisions a young noblewoman of those times had to make: love or comfortable life? You did a great job of setting the scene and telling the story in so few words. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wry humor in the ending--so true, alas--clever twist on the usual happily-ever-after--but given this is a flash, I expect it will be the basis for an eventual more auspicious turn of events. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Wry humor in the ending--so true, alas--clever twist on the usual happily-ever-after--but given this is a flash, I expect it will be the basis for an eventual more auspicious turn of events. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Susan Larson
Yep, Papa holds the purse strings. What will Elise sacrifice for love? And I don't think the Marquis is exactly a pauper. You have the makings of a good fairy tale here. Wishing you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Yep, Papa holds the purse strings. What will Elise sacrifice for love? And I don't think the Marquis is exactly a pauper. You have the makings of a good fairy tale here. Wishing you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from DonandVicki
A very engaging flash fiction, however I think that you should flesh this out after the contest. this would make a very good short but longer fictional romantic story.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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A very engaging flash fiction, however I think that you should flesh this out after the contest. this would make a very good short but longer fictional romantic story.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very well-written and, as with delightful romantic dreams, the reality is cold hard facts. Your fairy-tale pictures are good support for your story. I enjoy reading your writings.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Very well-written and, as with delightful romantic dreams, the reality is cold hard facts. Your fairy-tale pictures are good support for your story. I enjoy reading your writings.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thanks for those encouraging words zanya
Comment from LJbutterfly
I would love this story to continue. As soon as I read Lady Elise working on needlepoint I knew I was in for a Victorian romance or a fairytale, both my favorites. This short story was beautifully written with superb imagery that captured the reader from beginning to end. But, what happens when Papa returns? Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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I would love this story to continue. As soon as I read Lady Elise working on needlepoint I knew I was in for a Victorian romance or a fairytale, both my favorites. This short story was beautifully written with superb imagery that captured the reader from beginning to end. But, what happens when Papa returns? Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great review zanya
Comment from Leann DS
This short story showed a complete interaction between a mother and her daughter, with good details and imagery in only a few words. The first paragraph set up the scene. Best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs and blessings.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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This short story showed a complete interaction between a mother and her daughter, with good details and imagery in only a few words. The first paragraph set up the scene. Best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs and blessings.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great review zanya
Comment from royowen
Yes, I think that was the way it was for women in days past, the owned everything, whether it be Papa, or Lord Fointleroy, and it was your own personal fortune, the man owned it. Beautifully written my friend, liked this, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Yes, I think that was the way it was for women in days past, the owned everything, whether it be Papa, or Lord Fointleroy, and it was your own personal fortune, the man owned it. Beautifully written my friend, liked this, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great reveiw zanya
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A pleasure
