Let Me Be.
5 line poem.49 total reviews
Comment from roof35
This a lovely picture to go with your lovely words. This is an excellent entry for the Five Line Poem contest. It made me think a bit about your words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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This a lovely picture to go with your lovely words. This is an excellent entry for the Five Line Poem contest. It made me think a bit about your words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Patty Cicero
Leave me
To dance
On the roulette edge
as it spins and if I fall
no sobs just silence
*very nice piece. Guys work could be symbolic of many things. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Leave me
To dance
On the roulette edge
as it spins and if I fall
no sobs just silence
*very nice piece. Guys work could be symbolic of many things. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good artwork and
presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and
alliteration.
-My favorite is " dance on
the roulette edge.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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-Very good artwork and
presentation, Sanku.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and
alliteration.
-My favorite is " dance on
the roulette edge.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in your five-line poem. It conveys a powerful message about the desire to be allowed to live freely and make one's mistakes, as is normal.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in your five-line poem. It conveys a powerful message about the desire to be allowed to live freely and make one's mistakes, as is normal.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from estory
Nice job creating that spinning effect in the short lines. I also really liked this image of the 'roullette edge', this sense of living dangerously, out on the edge of life. Also the ending was great, this drop off of the dance into a musing silence. Its like the dance creates a sense of contemplation. estory
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Nice job creating that spinning effect in the short lines. I also really liked this image of the 'roullette edge', this sense of living dangerously, out on the edge of life. Also the ending was great, this drop off of the dance into a musing silence. Its like the dance creates a sense of contemplation. estory
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from QC Poet
Interesting concept poem, if one is dancing on a roulette's edge, I'd hope my balance could sustain me as the likelihood of losing my balance would be greater and more of a likelihood. Thanks for Sharing your thought provoking poetry. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Interesting concept poem, if one is dancing on a roulette's edge, I'd hope my balance could sustain me as the likelihood of losing my balance would be greater and more of a likelihood. Thanks for Sharing your thought provoking poetry. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from amada
These are very touchin and loveble 5 lines poem. Even in its hortness of lines there is a deep cry to individuality. A very creative work that opens my eyes to those possibilities.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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These are very touchin and loveble 5 lines poem. Even in its hortness of lines there is a deep cry to individuality. A very creative work that opens my eyes to those possibilities.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Leave me
To dance
On the roulette edge
as it spins and if I fall
no sobs just silence.
And
Along with the beautiful image of the ballerina makes a beautiful a 5 lines, is to my a winner
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Leave me
To dance
On the roulette edge
as it spins and if I fall
no sobs just silence.
And
Along with the beautiful image of the ballerina makes a beautiful a 5 lines, is to my a winner
Gert
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning presentation in its entirety - smoothly fluid verse and exquisite imagery, and fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this lovely write...
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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In my opinion, a stunning presentation in its entirety - smoothly fluid verse and exquisite imagery, and fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this lovely write...
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
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You are very welcome, Sanku...Eve
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Let Me Be.
by Sanku
Hello, Sanku,
Great entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. It flows well. Nice presentation. Wonderful imagery of dancers.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Let Me Be.
by Sanku
Hello, Sanku,
Great entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. It flows well. Nice presentation. Wonderful imagery of dancers.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
