Fairy Friend Flying By Me
Cumulative rhyming children's poem36 total reviews
Comment from Vanna1
A creative and original piece. A little too much repetition for me. Good visuals. The rhymes are simple but good. A fun piece for kids though. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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A creative and original piece. A little too much repetition for me. Good visuals. The rhymes are simple but good. A fun piece for kids though. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Yes, it is a bit repetitious for adults, but this type of cumulative rhyme is great for young children. Thank you for your comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written rhyming poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. I love your repeating line. And run with my fairy friend flying by me. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This is a nicely written rhyming poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. I love your repeating line. And run with my fairy friend flying by me. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. It is humbly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from dragonpoet
I have never seen this type of poem here. It shows all the things a child can do outside on a summer's day. I hope the fairy is having as much fun as the child. I like the added sound effects for emotions at the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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I have never seen this type of poem here. It shows all the things a child can do outside on a summer's day. I hope the fairy is having as much fun as the child. I like the added sound effects for emotions at the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much. Your comments and ratings are humbly appreciated. Hugs and blessings.
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You are most kindly welcome.
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Comment from AnnaLinda
Leann,
I like how you have chosen to write a children's poem for the rhyming contest. You've done a great job on it. It sure does have a lot of fun rhymes and I like how you keep adding one rhyme on top of the last
repeating line.
Seems like it would be fun to read to young children. I liked this part:
"I smell the flowers,
Stay out for hours...
I skip on a log,
I hop like a frog...
I go for a ride,
I glide down the slide..."
Those were the days, huh?
Best wishes in the contest,
Anna
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Leann,
I like how you have chosen to write a children's poem for the rhyming contest. You've done a great job on it. It sure does have a lot of fun rhymes and I like how you keep adding one rhyme on top of the last
repeating line.
Seems like it would be fun to read to young children. I liked this part:
"I smell the flowers,
Stay out for hours...
I skip on a log,
I hop like a frog...
I go for a ride,
I glide down the slide..."
Those were the days, huh?
Best wishes in the contest,
Anna
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and for your thoughtful comments. Sometimes, I wish I could just take an entire day and go slide down a slide over and over! :-)
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Maybe we should. I was thinking of starting a contest or club for children's poetry. I don't mind if you beat me to it.
Anna
Comment from DonandVicki
I'm sure your grandchildren will always remember with fondness that their grandfather is/was a poet. I'm sure they will frame this poem or put it in their scrapbooks.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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I'm sure your grandchildren will always remember with fondness that their grandfather is/was a poet. I'm sure they will frame this poem or put it in their scrapbooks.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from royowen
I can see lots of girls in those names, 9 girls and just one boy, I'll bet they're all precious, but don't spoil the boy too much, we have a mere five grands, 4 boys and just one girl, but all precious. Well done with this kiddies rhyming poem, I'm impressed, well done, good writing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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I can see lots of girls in those names, 9 girls and just one boy, I'll bet they're all precious, but don't spoil the boy too much, we have a mere five grands, 4 boys and just one girl, but all precious. Well done with this kiddies rhyming poem, I'm impressed, well done, good writing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Roy, for your complementary review and rating. Yes, nine girls followed by one loan little baby in blue. They're all spoiled, to be honest. :-) Ain't grandkids the best?!
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They are, we are very fortunate
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I really enjoyed this cute poem.
It would make a lovely children's book - I think that children would enjoy reading along with a grown up and would probably learn the lines (and sound effects/actions!) by heart after a couple of read throughs :)
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Hello :)
I really enjoyed this cute poem.
It would make a lovely children's book - I think that children would enjoy reading along with a grown up and would probably learn the lines (and sound effects/actions!) by heart after a couple of read throughs :)
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you. I humbly appreciate your kind review and complementary words. My daughter is going to make up a melody for the words and we are creating a song. Hugs to you.
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How lovely :)
You?re welcome x
Comment from Susan Larson
What a precious poem you wrote for your grandchildren. When I was a pre school teacher, I could just see myself using your poem for responsive reading with the kids, having them memorize the rhyming lines. Great job!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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What a precious poem you wrote for your grandchildren. When I was a pre school teacher, I could just see myself using your poem for responsive reading with the kids, having them memorize the rhyming lines. Great job!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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When I was writing this, I not only thought of my grandchildren, but also of my preschool classes. I owned and operated a preschool for two years, but our location was bad and we couldn't keep going any longer. I really loved and miss that job. Thank you for your comments. Hugs.
Comment from Janet Foor
A fun to read Children's Poem. I love the repeating lines and this sing/song sound that the well chosen words make.
Well done. I'm sure those grandchildren love it too.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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A fun to read Children's Poem. I love the repeating lines and this sing/song sound that the well chosen words make.
Well done. I'm sure those grandchildren love it too.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful and kind words. The little grandchildren like it, but the teenagers? Not so much. :-) Thanks again.
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this lovely poem. I gather it is aimed at children as the repitition is so suitable for kids. I wish you lots of luck in the rhyming competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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I really enjoyed reading this lovely poem. I gather it is aimed at children as the repitition is so suitable for kids. I wish you lots of luck in the rhyming competition. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Yes, it is for children, particularly primary aged students. Thank you so much for your kind review. Hugs.
