Zoo Murder:
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Zoo Murder: Believe It or Not"Bull Schlitz has a case of murder at the zoo.
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Comment from Mistydawn
He died of a stroke, caused by the bees lol. I sure didn't see that coming. I guess it's safe to say they were beed off about their travel arrangements. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting, quite a surprise ending.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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He died of a stroke, caused by the bees lol. I sure didn't see that coming. I guess it's safe to say they were beed off about their travel arrangements. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting, quite a surprise ending.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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I had to find a new way tokill somebody and this is what I came up with. Thank you, MD.
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It's very creative.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I don't know if I should congratulate you for writing a very "Punny Story," or sensor you for making fun of a very serious situation.
I am very glad that you have finally finished this story, and can file all your characters away on a shelf in FanStories bookcase. Have you invented a whole cast of new characters?
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Dear Bill, I don't know if I should congratulate you for writing a very "Punny Story," or sensor you for making fun of a very serious situation.
I am very glad that you have finally finished this story, and can file all your characters away on a shelf in FanStories bookcase. Have you invented a whole cast of new characters?
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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The two detectives, DA, and zoo lawyer will be seen again I think.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
What a tangled web they weave when first they manage to deceive! This certainly involved a lot of deception and quite a few involved deceivers. The innovative thought behind this story is rather sterling.
Ralf
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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What a tangled web they weave when first they manage to deceive! This certainly involved a lot of deception and quite a few involved deceivers. The innovative thought behind this story is rather sterling.
Ralf
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Ralf. You are very kind. Bill
Comment from Mastery
Hi Bill. I see you are up to your old tricks with dialogue again here: ""Well, alright then. Thank you, Detective, but we'll just leave it to Cleaver."
(Oooh That hurt lol)
And: ""So they were Mayan -- not His'n," said the judge with a grin."
Still holding with your great humor, my friend.
Bob
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Hi Bill. I see you are up to your old tricks with dialogue again here: ""Well, alright then. Thank you, Detective, but we'll just leave it to Cleaver."
(Oooh That hurt lol)
And: ""So they were Mayan -- not His'n," said the judge with a grin."
Still holding with your great humor, my friend.
Bob
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Bob, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from BethShelby
Whoever said truth is stranger than fiction has met you. The is quite a tale that no amount of truth is likely to rival. My congratulations to Bull and DWeir and all the rest for solving this case. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Whoever said truth is stranger than fiction has met you. The is quite a tale that no amount of truth is likely to rival. My congratulations to Bull and DWeir and all the rest for solving this case. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is so funny:"
"The deceased, Cyril Loyne, had a pouch made under his belly epidermis to carry bees across the border."
"No shit!" blurted the judge.
"The bees were apparently stingless, but their aggressive biting seems to have raised the man's blood pressure until he had a stroke and died at the zoo," said the DA." Wired way to die stink by bees. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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This is so funny:"
"The deceased, Cyril Loyne, had a pouch made under his belly epidermis to carry bees across the border."
"No shit!" blurted the judge.
"The bees were apparently stingless, but their aggressive biting seems to have raised the man's blood pressure until he had a stroke and died at the zoo," said the DA." Wired way to die stink by bees. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thanks, Iza
Comment from RetroStarfish
Hilarious. The final chapter of this book is the only one I've read, but it is summed up nicely and made me chuckle. The names alone are guffaw-worthy. Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Hilarious. The final chapter of this book is the only one I've read, but it is summed up nicely and made me chuckle. The names alone are guffaw-worthy. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thanks, RS, for giving this a look. Bill
