First Class Mail
It's all about the choices we make.6 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Intriguing twist! She decides to live and kill him (in her fantasy?) instead.
Fine work in a flash!
Her right hand held open the postal box, and her left [the letter she'd written to Tom and her red sunglasses.]
sugg reverse order:=>[her red suglasses and the letter ... ]
her reflections=>REFLECTION waved a bloody knife.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Intriguing twist! She decides to live and kill him (in her fantasy?) instead.
Fine work in a flash!
Her right hand held open the postal box, and her left [the letter she'd written to Tom and her red sunglasses.]
sugg reverse order:=>[her red suglasses and the letter ... ]
her reflections=>REFLECTION waved a bloody knife.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your suggestion and catching the extra "s." You're right switching puts more emphasis on the letter.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a great piece of flash fiction. It's well-written, interesting. Your descriptive beginning drew me right in, made me have empathy for your character. Her lip quivered as she released the envelope. A single tear escaped as she put on her sunglasses is a perfect touch. I love the great ending, deciding to take her life back, quite a surprise. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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What a great piece of flash fiction. It's well-written, interesting. Your descriptive beginning drew me right in, made me have empathy for your character. Her lip quivered as she released the envelope. A single tear escaped as she put on her sunglasses is a perfect touch. I love the great ending, deciding to take her life back, quite a surprise. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the stars. I am glad you liked it. Especially the little details. I wanted readers to understand the state she was in before having changed her mind and deciding to live.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, interesting, so she was going to commit suicide, and send a letter to Tom, but had a vision and then decided it was better to live and kill Tom. With tag line: She wasn't going to play the victim anymore.
She's just going to create a victim?
Interesting.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Hmm, interesting, so she was going to commit suicide, and send a letter to Tom, but had a vision and then decided it was better to live and kill Tom. With tag line: She wasn't going to play the victim anymore.
She's just going to create a victim?
Interesting.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Yes, indeed she is it seems. If someone has to be the victim it seems it will not be her. Thank you you much for taking the time to review.
Comment from Sanku
This is an absolutely well written flash fiction with a message in it .No one need to be a victim. The phantom vision seemed to give Mary confidence.All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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This is an absolutely well written flash fiction with a message in it .No one need to be a victim. The phantom vision seemed to give Mary confidence.All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well told story. It does leave some questions unanswered, however. Like was the letter a blackmail payment or a jilted lovers letter to a wife? Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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This is a well told story. It does leave some questions unanswered, however. Like was the letter a blackmail payment or a jilted lovers letter to a wife? Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from Karen Estep
I found your writing to be cryptic in some ways, but the mystery adds to the flow of your story. I relate to this. Thank you so much for writing! Loved the graphic!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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I found your writing to be cryptic in some ways, but the mystery adds to the flow of your story. I relate to this. Thank you so much for writing! Loved the graphic!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
