Jesse James' Gold
A 250 word Flash Fiction entry.4 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
Nice flash fiction. I guess you got to at the perfect angle to see what you're looking for. Being knocked to the ground seems to have opened his vision.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Nice flash fiction. I guess you got to at the perfect angle to see what you're looking for. Being knocked to the ground seems to have opened his vision.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Beth for reading this story and for the very nice review.
If the canteen water had not splashed on the boulder, they would most likely never have found the hidden gold.
Thanks again,
Dick
Comment from roof35
It still leaves a question and I suspect that is what you planned. This is interesting and well written. Of course, that picture sets the stage. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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It still leaves a question and I suspect that is what you planned. This is interesting and well written. Of course, that picture sets the stage. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Judy for reading this story and for the very nice review. They indeed found the buried treasure when the water from the canteen wet the boulder he was sitting on.
Thanks again,
Dick
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well in the end, things turned out ok, right? They found what they were looking for after the almost brawl. I enjoyed your contest entry. It read well with good dialogue and great details. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Well in the end, things turned out ok, right? They found what they were looking for after the almost brawl. I enjoyed your contest entry. It read well with good dialogue and great details. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Jan for reading this story and for the very nice review.
Yes, the spilled water from the canteen wet the boulder he was sitting on, thus revealing the buried treasure. Things happen the way they are supposed to.
Thanks again,
Dick
Comment from RodG
I enjoyed your treasure map story. You set the scene very well giving us a clear picture of the treasure site. You also introduce the two arguing friends nicely. The only line that does not work for me is the last one, but you've almost got it. Rod
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed your treasure map story. You set the scene very well giving us a clear picture of the treasure site. You also introduce the two arguing friends nicely. The only line that does not work for me is the last one, but you've almost got it. Rod
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Rod,
Thanks again for reading one of my posts, and for the very nice review.
The spilled water from the canteen wet the boulder he was sitting on, revealing the JJ and the buried treasure.
Thanks again,
Dick
