Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Mark, this is clever. I like the picture you have chosen to represent this haiku write. I like the end line that describes the artist behind the lines. I personally do not like spiders but I love their webs. Great job. ~DD

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021

DD,

Pleased my spider post worked for you. Other reviewers have also commented on the FanArt illustration. I hope to find other works by this artist for future posts. FanArt is my go-to source for illustrations to complement my FS posts.

Mark

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a nicely written poem. Thin black lines drape walls with an intricate design. Spider artistry. Well done. Awesome artwork to go with your words.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

So pleased you enjoyed my overall presentation Joanne! I typically use FanArt for all my posts, although I am disappointed with its search engine for words or phrases.

Mark

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this descriptive, appealing poem. Spiders are capable of some amazing
art designs! Fitting artwork

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Thanks Janice for your review and stars. The spider weaves its web for all to appreciate.

Mark

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

thin black lines drape walls
with an intricate design ~
spider artistry


simply creative nice words to make this come to life a spider artistry
this is outstanding!! thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Donette,

Thanks for your kind words for my spider post.

Mark

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Mark,

This was pretty stinking cool, bud. First off, the image was a great way to start off this post, for sure. It was definitely striking and holds your attention. Wow.

Then, to speak of spider webs as 'intricate designs' and 'artistry', I think is totally appropriate. Nice! If there was anything I didn't love about this post it's the syllable count. In modern Western haiku, we are not restricted to the 5/7/5 count. (I feel certain you know that.) By creating and sharing post that continue to stick to that format it seems we just keep propating that myth, you know? As long as your haiku are 17 syllables OR LESS, you should be fine. BUT - that's my hangup - it doesn't have to be yours. *smile*

Thanks a bunch. I enjoyed this - thanks for the smile!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Robyn,

Yep, I often conform to that rigid 5-7-5 rather use the more traditional Japanese ?sound? format. I strive to create my Haiku with its satori line, but it is difficult to achieve consistently. If you want to see really good Haiku, visit theHaikuFoundation.org web site. It requires no funny monies to post to the same and there are typically no voting contests either. I follow Gypsy Blue Rose and she often writes her Haiku with less than 17 syllables. Except for strict contest rules, I am trying to write with less than 17 too.

Mark

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

The webs these spiders weave are artwork of a different kind. Intricate and also quite deadly! But still beautiful in a weird sort of way. Plus the silk is strong as steel in the insect world.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

June,

What webs we can spin about this post. Thanks for your review and comments.

Mark

P.S. My spider artist is more benevolent and not the deadly Black Widow arachnid (-;

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Spider webs are fascinating in both design and suspension. I am always amazed how a spider finds ways to "drape" its web. The artwork you chose is perfect Thor this poem. Rod

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Rod,

Always pleased with your insight for my poems. Glad the illustration worked for you too.

Mark

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I always though spider webs were more gray than black. But their designs are pretty and intricate. Very nice job. Stay safe and stay healthy.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Thanks Earl for your comments. Those spider webs always looked black to me, but they were creepy if I walked into a vacant house and I had to brush them away.

Mark

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

arachnid artwork
by Mark D. R.

Hello Mark

Spiders.... they're so creepy. Your poem flows well, good syllable count and connection between lines. The structure makes sense. It presents strong images.

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 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Thanks Gypsy for your recognition. Spiders are creepy except the ones crawling up the water spout in the children?s poem (-;

Mark

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This has a double meaning. The black widow, itself, and the black widow, herself. Clever and creative, dear Mark. I wish you all the best with this,
Sally :)) XOs....

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 Comment Written 02-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021

Sally,

My spiders are benevolent, including those climbing up the water spout in the children?s poem. LOL

Mark