Listening To My Clock
Modern clocks are silent6 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The lovely plethora of alliteration will draw the reader in. This alliteration becomes onomatopoetic. There are growls and hisses heard if the reader reads this aloud. That is the only way to read poetry. The reader misses the deepest of meanings if they do not read this aloud. I am voting for this one.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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The lovely plethora of alliteration will draw the reader in. This alliteration becomes onomatopoetic. There are growls and hisses heard if the reader reads this aloud. That is the only way to read poetry. The reader misses the deepest of meanings if they do not read this aloud. I am voting for this one.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Liz, I'm so happy you read this aloud. I absolutely agree about the importance of sound in poetry. Thank you so much for your support.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Listening To My Clock
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest. I like the clock idea. It's very unique.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Listening To My Clock
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest. I like the clock idea. It's very unique.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy. I'm so glad you liked it and took the time to say so!
Comment from cupa tea
I have to say I like the way you set this poem up. I've never seen it done like that before. Great Job...I saw nothing to correct. But, I'm not much of a poetry writer.
Good luck
blessed be
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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I have to say I like the way you set this poem up. I've never seen it done like that before. Great Job...I saw nothing to correct. But, I'm not much of a poetry writer.
Good luck
blessed be
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Thank you, cupa tea. Even though this is a free verse poem, I felt like I had to limit the first line of each stanza to four beats, to echo the ticking clock. That was an after-thought, and it took me more time to edit those first lines than to write the poem in the first place. Thank you for your kind comment and stars.
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that makes since...I bet it did...picking and chosing words...
Good luck!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
One... two... three... four... Life has ups and downs. We don't have to overjoyed when it is up; nor should we be overly worried when it is down.
Value time and don't let it go without doing something meaningful.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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One... two... three... four... Life has ups and downs. We don't have to overjoyed when it is up; nor should we be overly worried when it is down.
Value time and don't let it go without doing something meaningful.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the comment and the stars. You've offered Goodadvice, chan!
:)
Comment from Mark D. R.
I hardly consider myself as a poet (I only typically compose 5-7-5 poems), but your title, subtitle, and image teased me to read your longer verse.
It seems this is real poetry and you expressed yourself perfectly. We are all ticking clocks and we hope that the craziness surrounding us will not shut down or limit our time on this good Earth.
Hope you enjoy your coffee and not its dregs (-;
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I hardly consider myself as a poet (I only typically compose 5-7-5 poems), but your title, subtitle, and image teased me to read your longer verse.
It seems this is real poetry and you expressed yourself perfectly. We are all ticking clocks and we hope that the craziness surrounding us will not shut down or limit our time on this good Earth.
Hope you enjoy your coffee and not its dregs (-;
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Mark, for reading and commenting on my poem. Your's is an interpretation I hadn't considered; thank you!
I have an old clock where I write that clearly ticks off each second. As I wrote this, I suddenly thought of something that I'd heard years ago, when George Harrison was putting together the Concert for Bangladesh in the early 70s. He said one person was dying of starvation every second in Bangladesh. This poem was just a lament, while listening to the seconds tick away, of how helpless we are as individuals to make a significant difference. I was warm and comfortable, looking out at the beautiful snow on the lake, listening to my clock, realizing that giving everything I own would be a drop in the sea.
Comment from Pierre Bartoli
Love the message conveyed in this poem. Let's people know that we take some things we have for granted. Which is why I donate every chance I get. Also the poem had a Riddler from Batman type of feeling.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Love the message conveyed in this poem. Let's people know that we take some things we have for granted. Which is why I donate every chance I get. Also the poem had a Riddler from Batman type of feeling.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Pierre, thank you for the stars! But please tell me (I'm ashamed (I think) to admit it but the only Batman that I'm at all familiar with is the Adam West TV series from the Sixties): what is the Riddler feel you're picking up? That's interesting. Is it that I leave the meaning of the ticking clock to the very end? My dad wouldn't let me read comic books, so I feel like I missed out on the aesthetics of that genre.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
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The riddler always had a clock and made certain puzzles for people to solve. He would leave clues but never fully give away the answer.
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Oh, now, I like that! It describes poetry in general, doesn't it? As writers, we too should leave clues, but allow enough room for each reader to "solve the puzzle" in their own way. Thank you, Blind Entry contest responder!
