Comment from Cecilia Lynne1

Excellent

I like the Morning Coffee Theme

It follows the contest requirements and the rhyming is in line. This is not an easy poem to write and you have a positive story line and message. All the best.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021

thanks

reply by Cecilia Lynne1 on 10-Mar-2021

Comment from Susan Newell

Good

This is a very complex structure, and if I read it correctly, your second to last line should have two syllables, not three. I haven't checked the rhyme pattern or other syllable counts.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021

thanks I revised it to fix a few errors. It was indeed complex to write

reply by Susan Newell on 24-Feb-2021

Glad to hear it! Tough to meet all requirements.

Comment from Mands

Excellent

Love this, can almost taste the coffee. It flows very well. I really love the lines: But some of them are just scorning, Tactical warning. I wish you lots of luck in the contest :-)

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021

revised it extensively, did not get the rhyming or word count quite right so i fixed itthanks