The Promise of Spring
Amphibrach meter26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
When I was a little kid, I used to play in the nearby woods with my friends... cowboys and Indians, or war games, or Hide & Seek, or Frozen Tag, or Capture the Flag. It was always special when I'd find a broken robin's egg... the prettiest blue there is. Sky blue. And every time I'd find one, I'd think that there is a baby bird learning to fly.
Loved your poem!
"Small, delicate pieces of bright, sky~blue fragments
are scattered beneath the old applewood tree."
Your poem reminds me of my son's stress load in caring for baby Isla. (She'll be 17 months old on the 9th of September, so almost a toddler.) Can I send your poem on to him? It might do him good to realize that even robins are busy looking after little ones.
"An urgency chases the tired little Robin
to hasten her foraging for their new brood."
Nicely penned! I especially enjoyed your closing lines,
"Excitedly perched on the edge of adventures,
they leap from the nest, as they soar into Spring!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Hi Melissa,
When I was a little kid, I used to play in the nearby woods with my friends... cowboys and Indians, or war games, or Hide & Seek, or Frozen Tag, or Capture the Flag. It was always special when I'd find a broken robin's egg... the prettiest blue there is. Sky blue. And every time I'd find one, I'd think that there is a baby bird learning to fly.
Loved your poem!
"Small, delicate pieces of bright, sky~blue fragments
are scattered beneath the old applewood tree."
Your poem reminds me of my son's stress load in caring for baby Isla. (She'll be 17 months old on the 9th of September, so almost a toddler.) Can I send your poem on to him? It might do him good to realize that even robins are busy looking after little ones.
"An urgency chases the tired little Robin
to hasten her foraging for their new brood."
Nicely penned! I especially enjoyed your closing lines,
"Excitedly perched on the edge of adventures,
they leap from the nest, as they soar into Spring!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 06-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Hello KB. Of course, you may send it to him. I know he is kept very busy chasing after little Isla. What an adorable age!! Thank you so much!!
Melissa
Comment from country ranch writer
Love the work up and presentation for this poem ,love seing the nest bet momma bird was exhausted trying to fill their little mouths trying to fill them up.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Love the work up and presentation for this poem ,love seing the nest bet momma bird was exhausted trying to fill their little mouths trying to fill them up.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Barbara.
Melissa
Comment from country ranch writer
Love the work up and presentation for this poem ,love seing the nest bet momma bird was exhausted trying to fill their little mouths trying to fill them up.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Love the work up and presentation for this poem ,love seing the nest bet momma bird was exhausted trying to fill their little mouths trying to fill them up.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Hi Barbara. I cannot wait for springtime to get here.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Wood the tree fall too far from the apple, Melissa. :) Sometimes, I wonder if it does agree with me or I agree with the saying. I haven't gotten on the computer for a few days so I'm late. This is a good offering for the Rhyming poem Contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Wood the tree fall too far from the apple, Melissa. :) Sometimes, I wonder if it does agree with me or I agree with the saying. I haven't gotten on the computer for a few days so I'm late. This is a good offering for the Rhyming poem Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thanks so much, Jose. So glad you are able to get on your computer again.
Melissa
Comment from Boogienights
This is so beautiful and my favorite subject. I love birds, they are both strong and beautiful, they look amazing when they fly and they are a hearty group. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This is so beautiful and my favorite subject. I love birds, they are both strong and beautiful, they look amazing when they fly and they are a hearty group. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Hey there Sharon. Thanks so much. I am sitting on pins and needles waiting for springtime and my daffodils to bloom. I saw a few Robins a few days ago, and they were an inspiration. So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I like the photo you choose to go with your poem, they are a prefect match.
You captured my attention from the first word to the last.
Yes soon it will be spring I can't wait I had it with the snow
Thank you for sharing,
Cookie
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I like the photo you choose to go with your poem, they are a prefect match.
You captured my attention from the first word to the last.
Yes soon it will be spring I can't wait I had it with the snow
Thank you for sharing,
Cookie
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I know what you mean about too much snow!! We got ice instead and lost four trees. Ugh! Thanks so much for the lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written rhyming poem. I love this part. New nestlings are chirping their boisterous greeting reminding their parents to hurry feed me. It has a nice flow and rhyme . I love your photo it compliments your poem so well.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This is a beautifully written rhyming poem. I love this part. New nestlings are chirping their boisterous greeting reminding their parents to hurry feed me. It has a nice flow and rhyme . I love your photo it compliments your poem so well.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you Joanne. I learned about the amphibrach meter in the FanStory poetry classes. It is one of my faves. I really appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Amphibrach meter
The Promise of Spring
by Sugarray77
Hello, sugar Ray,
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Nice Amphibrach meter
Lovely imagery of nature scene.
I like the image of the robin bird feeding her brood.
Like our children grow up and leave the nest so do the little birds.
Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Amphibrach meter
The Promise of Spring
by Sugarray77
Hello, sugar Ray,
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Nice Amphibrach meter
Lovely imagery of nature scene.
I like the image of the robin bird feeding her brood.
Like our children grow up and leave the nest so do the little birds.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hello Gypsy. Thanks so much for the wonderfully supportive review. I agree that the birds leaving their nests resembles our own broods growing up and leaving. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from damommy
After the winter storm we've just been through, Spring looks far away. It's close, though, and how welcome it will be. It's hard for me to tell the different between amphibrach and anapest. You wrote a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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After the winter storm we've just been through, Spring looks far away. It's close, though, and how welcome it will be. It's hard for me to tell the different between amphibrach and anapest. You wrote a lovely poem.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hi Yvonne. I know you all are covered with snow, but look on the bright side, when it melts you will see all of those bulblets forcing up from the ground. :). Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from harmony13
Hi Melissa, This poem is beautiful! The words give hope, a vision, are interesting and creative. I feel at this time in our lives we need uplifting words to help us stay centered. I also found this poem gives us something to look forward too. Thank you. Hope you are doing well....Maria
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hi Melissa, This poem is beautiful! The words give hope, a vision, are interesting and creative. I feel at this time in our lives we need uplifting words to help us stay centered. I also found this poem gives us something to look forward too. Thank you. Hope you are doing well....Maria
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hello Maria. Thank you for your lovely review. Hugs!
Melissa
