birds and bees advice
contemporary Haiku (Wise old owl teaches)9 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
birds and bees advice
by Mark D. R.
Hello, Mark,
Cool 5/7/5 about the birds and bees. LoL
Clever satori. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I didn't read the picture so I could focus on your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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birds and bees advice
by Mark D. R.
Hello, Mark,
Cool 5/7/5 about the birds and bees. LoL
Clever satori. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I didn't read the picture so I could focus on your poem.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Pleased you liked this one Gypsy! I am a work in progress in creating better satori lines.
Mark
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We are all work in progress :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
Ha! Ha! This is a cute one. I love the cartoon clip with your poem. It just about says it all. The look on the little boy's face is priceless. I also thought it funny that the birds and the bees missed the sex ed class. good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Ha! Ha! This is a cute one. I love the cartoon clip with your poem. It just about says it all. The look on the little boy's face is priceless. I also thought it funny that the birds and the bees missed the sex ed class. good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Patty,
Thanks for your kind remarks. A few FS reviewers somehow did not understand why the birds and needs missed the sex ed class - funny I thought it was obvious. I can?t recall explaining this situation to my children, but surely my spouse did. LOL
The cartoon tells it like it is (-;
Comment from Mia Twysted
I hate to say that I don't really get this piece. I can tell there is supposed to be some kind of joke or pun, but it just is not computing in my mind. I think I am missing a much needed component.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I hate to say that I don't really get this piece. I can tell there is supposed to be some kind of joke or pun, but it just is not computing in my mind. I think I am missing a much needed component.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Mia,
Your parents or adults may have explained the birds and bees story to you. The stork delivering the baby never worked for me. I was trying to say the other animals did not have the birds and bees in their class or the cartoon to explain the situation.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, Ha, ha this is so funny:) I was thinking that they just do it; "Wise old owl teaches
forest creatures about sex.
Birds and bees missed class." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Ha, Ha, ha this is so funny:) I was thinking that they just do it; "Wise old owl teaches
forest creatures about sex.
Birds and bees missed class." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Iza,
THANKS for sharing my amusement. Maybe they did it more than once! I appreciate your good luck wishes.
Comment from lancellot
The form and syllable count are spot on and your work is clearly animal related. The context I found a bit confusing. I didn't understand the joke or point.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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The form and syllable count are spot on and your work is clearly animal related. The context I found a bit confusing. I didn't understand the joke or point.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Did a teacher or educator or your Mom or Dad ever explain the story of the birds and bees to you? The owl is doing its best, but some of the students in the woods apparently know the story already!
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No offense. I just didn't get it. Best wishes to you.
Comment from equestrik
This is at best, interesting and clever. It is a bit of a strange way to put things but I get it. I do appreciate the chuckles it gave me and I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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This is at best, interesting and clever. It is a bit of a strange way to put things but I get it. I do appreciate the chuckles it gave me and I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Not quite sure if ?horse sense? would work the same way LOL
Do appreciate your support and good wishes for this contest entry.
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Yes indeed!
Comment from Jean Lutz1
Oh my. Sex education in the class room described in three lines. Do you know how much is being spent trying to educate what the birds and bees figured out all by themselves? Not only that kids are graduation without being able to read and write! Artwork is perfect. Reminds me of an old, old Ray Stevens song "Don't look Ethel". This one is a winner for me.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Oh my. Sex education in the class room described in three lines. Do you know how much is being spent trying to educate what the birds and bees figured out all by themselves? Not only that kids are graduation without being able to read and write! Artwork is perfect. Reminds me of an old, old Ray Stevens song "Don't look Ethel". This one is a winner for me.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Jean,
Some classrooms are educating our youth (-;
So pleased you really liked this fun post.
Comment from donette1914
lol this little kid got a eye full for sure
so creative and such a fun write
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with a well penned poem
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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lol this little kid got a eye full for sure
so creative and such a fun write
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with a well penned poem
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Thanks for your good wishes for my contest entry. So pleased with your kind comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Birds and Bees Advise, has the right set up and nods at the vague birds and bees example of procreation which pales in comparison to the sweaty, enjoyable act.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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This 5-7-5, Birds and Bees Advise, has the right set up and nods at the vague birds and bees example of procreation which pales in comparison to the sweaty, enjoyable act.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Bill,
Thanks for your review. Sweat is good!
