Six Going on Homeless?
Children take things to heart!56 total reviews
Comment from Dana Starr
Isn't it amazing the way her little mind worked. That was a good story. I'll humor you and say that it's a shame you weren't able to enter it in the True Story Contest. I know you must be disappointed but at least people can read and enjoy it.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Isn't it amazing the way her little mind worked. That was a good story. I'll humor you and say that it's a shame you weren't able to enter it in the True Story Contest. I know you must be disappointed but at least people can read and enjoy it.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I really didn't need humoring... well/ maybe for a moment. After that I sighed and said, as you pointed out--it's written, it's posted...and there will always be other contests!--Karenina
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is quite a delightful story that I truly enjoyed reading. My adult daughter was an only child who asked for a sister when she was around the same age as Emy. When I told her she would have to share her Christmas toys, she no longer wanted a sister. I agree with you. Parents DO deserve the big bucks. I also agree that this story would have been a winner.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This is quite a delightful story that I truly enjoyed reading. My adult daughter was an only child who asked for a sister when she was around the same age as Emy. When I told her she would have to share her Christmas toys, she no longer wanted a sister. I agree with you. Parents DO deserve the big bucks. I also agree that this story would have been a winner.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thanks! We'll never know...although I nurse no illusions at my prose writing skill. I don't write other than poetry often and am still learning for sure. KIDS! A never ending source of delight and mystery! Thanks, Karenina
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is exceptional in every way. You wrote it so it was easy to read with space between sentences and no extra words used or needed to tell a lovely story worth repeating most definitely. I don't go in for contests so I don't even know how to enter versus not entering. But the story is very well written and presented with notes adding even more personal info. Your daughter sounds amazing and you can take a lot of credit, my friend! Great storytelling!
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This is exceptional in every way. You wrote it so it was easy to read with space between sentences and no extra words used or needed to tell a lovely story worth repeating most definitely. I don't go in for contests so I don't even know how to enter versus not entering. But the story is very well written and presented with notes adding even more personal info. Your daughter sounds amazing and you can take a lot of credit, my friend! Great storytelling!
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hi Jesse! Thanks for the six stars! Nothing like a true memory and a 350 word limit to help a "not very often" prose writer pare away the fat and try to convey the story in a lean way...without losing the magic of a six year old's perception! I was aggravated for about five minutes (hence my mini-rant about not entering it)--then I was just happy to share it here...and I called Emy and read it to her. SHE proclaimed me a "winner" and we had a good laugh over an old memory! I'm much appreciative over your comments and star generosity!--Karenina
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Hello Karenina.
It is wonderful that you have such a great relationship with your grandchild, Emy. If she says you won then you are the winner! I was glad that the post wasn't about homeless children after all. You never know these days! Have a marvelous week, my friend.
Jesse
Comment from Jay Squires
That was such a warm story, Karenina. From the sounds of things, your daughter was just beginning to warm to the idea of mixing up a batch of baby for Emy until hubby threw out the kibosh! Since I am six-starved, I rewarded this with a bump up the ladder and a lucky Leprechaun. (I always have two or three and you can only use one with a post.)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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That was such a warm story, Karenina. From the sounds of things, your daughter was just beginning to warm to the idea of mixing up a batch of baby for Emy until hubby threw out the kibosh! Since I am six-starved, I rewarded this with a bump up the ladder and a lucky Leprechaun. (I always have two or three and you can only use one with a post.)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Aw, thanks Jay! As I've confessed... I don't write prose often and look to the likes of you to learn how to pare away the excess and struggle for the turn of a phrase that best conveys what I am reaching for. Love Leprechauns--and it's nearing St. Patrick's day... and a bump up the ladder makes you way too generous, which I truly appreciate!--Karenina
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Too bad you didn't enter it, it is such a great story and written well. Poor
Emy must have worried herself sick for a while. We really have no idea how a youngster interprets our words. We need to be careful.
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Too bad you didn't enter it, it is such a great story and written well. Poor
Emy must have worried herself sick for a while. We really have no idea how a youngster interprets our words. We need to be careful.
Ralf
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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We DO need to think to go back and validate with kiddos what they "heard" from our conversations... This was a wake up call! She ended up with a puppy (still her best "sibling")--and she and I shared a giggle when I called her and read her this memory/write!--Thanks, Karenina
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A lovely image for your story, Karenina.
-It is a cryin' shame you missed this
contest; I could see all the glory
coming your way!
-You did write a very good story,
and begin well by giving
background of your children.
-I like the GPS comment
about your daughter.
-She certainly was ambitious.
-I love the line about "sinking
into Grandma quicksand."
-The dialogue is very good as you
have this heart-to-heart with
your granddaughter.
-Her comments are priceless,
and you did the only thing you could-
run back and then punt!
-I enjoyed your story. I can
also totally relate to being an
only child, and my adult son is one, too.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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-A lovely image for your story, Karenina.
-It is a cryin' shame you missed this
contest; I could see all the glory
coming your way!
-You did write a very good story,
and begin well by giving
background of your children.
-I like the GPS comment
about your daughter.
-She certainly was ambitious.
-I love the line about "sinking
into Grandma quicksand."
-The dialogue is very good as you
have this heart-to-heart with
your granddaughter.
-Her comments are priceless,
and you did the only thing you could-
run back and then punt!
-I enjoyed your story. I can
also totally relate to being an
only child, and my adult son is one, too.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Wow. Thanks for understanding! I got over myself missing the contest quickly... meh, there will be others. I loved calling Emy (now 12) and reading the story to HER and reminiscing on those innocent misconstrued six year old perceptions. (PS--she told me I was "the winner" in her heart. SCORE!--Thanks, Karenina
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You are very welcome, Karenina. Thanks for sharing about your call, and you had to have been very pleased with her answer. How sweet!
Comment from BethShelby
This ia an adorable story and it is exactly how a child would react. The true story I entered is called The green-eyed monster lives. It is about me as a child who really felt left out because I was an only child, but it's probably a good thing because I was jealous of other children.
Beth
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This ia an adorable story and it is exactly how a child would react. The true story I entered is called The green-eyed monster lives. It is about me as a child who really felt left out because I was an only child, but it's probably a good thing because I was jealous of other children.
Beth
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I'll have to go look that up! I was the middle child. The only girl. MY mother told me early and often she only ever wanted "sons"--messed me up for a long time! Kids take things to heart... Thanks, Karenina
Comment from kmoss
I have to be honest, I thought this was going to be a sad, sad story by the title. I should have known better! It's funny and cute!
Great lines:
She was born with an advanced GPS and follows her coordinates faithfully.
I felt myself sinking into Grandma quicksand...
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I have to be honest, I thought this was going to be a sad, sad story by the title. I should have known better! It's funny and cute!
Great lines:
She was born with an advanced GPS and follows her coordinates faithfully.
I felt myself sinking into Grandma quicksand...
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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My favorite lines as well! I'm pretty much a rooky in this prose stuff... Stinks I messed up and missed the contest--but I spared myself anxiety over mine would be the only vote for this! (Always sunny side up, my brain insists!)-- All in all, I enjoyed writing it and then calling Emy and reading it to her. SHE declared it a winner so I'm "Walking on Sunshine."--Thanks for reviewing!--Karenina
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That's all that matters! :)
Comment from amada
This story is so sweet, it is true, "kids say the darnest thing..." It is great to remember their words for a posterity. True enough, they are delighted at the attention they get, at any age.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This story is so sweet, it is true, "kids say the darnest thing..." It is great to remember their words for a posterity. True enough, they are delighted at the attention they get, at any age.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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It bowled us over that she was worried about being tossed out should another baby come along! Kids take things concretely! Mom drove down, we had a three generation sleep over and Emy got a puppy that week--- Now at 12 she loves her life, loves her precocious pup and we got a nice chuckle out of this memory! Thanks, Karenina
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
I love this such a sweet story how she thought she would have to move out if her parents had a baby. Not realizing they couldn't have a baby along with her. In her little mind her parents were saying. You have to move if we have a baby. Very well done. Beautiful photo.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I love this such a sweet story how she thought she would have to move out if her parents had a baby. Not realizing they couldn't have a baby along with her. In her little mind her parents were saying. You have to move if we have a baby. Very well done. Beautiful photo.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you Joanne. Yup. She had it all figured out in her little six year old mind... She added two plus two and got 5! We laugh about it now... A reminder we have to check and double check what our children or grandchildren understand when we speak to them! --Karenina
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