The Friendship Fence
Remembering my dear friend, Lois44 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Excellent write! With brevity yet concise language you conveyed the essence of a set of "Gemini spirits" who found each other and wrung the joy out of each (over the fence) meeting! Love how delicately you described her passing...gently and peaceful as the friendship you both so obviously treasured. I could not give this less than six stars!--Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Excellent write! With brevity yet concise language you conveyed the essence of a set of "Gemini spirits" who found each other and wrung the joy out of each (over the fence) meeting! Love how delicately you described her passing...gently and peaceful as the friendship you both so obviously treasured. I could not give this less than six stars!--Karenina
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Karenina.
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Such a poignant write! Another may have chosen to be bitter for what they lost...you are grateful for what you two had!--Karenina
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear amada, this is truly a wonderful story, and a lovely way to start my day on FanStory. indeed you were blessed to have such a friend, and I am sure she is looking down from heaven with those beautiful shiny blue eyes, As she reads this story over your shoulder.
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Dear amada, this is truly a wonderful story, and a lovely way to start my day on FanStory. indeed you were blessed to have such a friend, and I am sure she is looking down from heaven with those beautiful shiny blue eyes, As she reads this story over your shoulder.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your great comments, Suzanne.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Amada,
You've really written a beautiful entry for the True Story Contest about your friend Lois. I like how you gave enough details about how you both had many things in common and I also like how you introduce that wedge of fence and the memorable conversation there.
You have imagery that allows your reader to join in the experience.
Your ending lines are particularly impacting:
"Now, each time I walk by that wedge of fence, that space glows like a celestial hello, an endless smile from my beloved next-door neighbor. And I smile as well"
Anna
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Amada,
You've really written a beautiful entry for the True Story Contest about your friend Lois. I like how you gave enough details about how you both had many things in common and I also like how you introduce that wedge of fence and the memorable conversation there.
You have imagery that allows your reader to join in the experience.
Your ending lines are particularly impacting:
"Now, each time I walk by that wedge of fence, that space glows like a celestial hello, an endless smile from my beloved next-door neighbor. And I smile as well"
Anna
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Anna. Your comments are precious.
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You are welcome, amada. My pleasure
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Beautifully written non fiction. Remembering a beautiful friendship you two shared. I love your photo very fitting for your story. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a Beautifully written non fiction. Remembering a beautiful friendship you two shared. I love your photo very fitting for your story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Joanne.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your concise nonfiction piece is excellent--well-worded, moving in its theme, and descriptive in the telling of a wonderful story of long-lasting close friendship.
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Your concise nonfiction piece is excellent--well-worded, moving in its theme, and descriptive in the telling of a wonderful story of long-lasting close friendship.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Janice.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a lovely tribute to a wonderful friend and neighbor, Amada. You were so lucky to have such a friend for 20 years. Well done dear. Good luck. Nancy:)
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This is a lovely tribute to a wonderful friend and neighbor, Amada. You were so lucky to have such a friend for 20 years. Well done dear. Good luck. Nancy:)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your precious comments, Nancy
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
My parents have neighbors like this. They actually have a community garden in the one neighbors yard. They all have their duties and everyone on the block eats from it. If my mom notices that someone has taken their stuff out she will pluck it out and take it to them. I hope many people have fond memories like this.
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My parents have neighbors like this. They actually have a community garden in the one neighbors yard. They all have their duties and everyone on the block eats from it. If my mom notices that someone has taken their stuff out she will pluck it out and take it to them. I hope many people have fond memories like this.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank yu for sharing that great community garden...outdoor activities are great for the body and the soul. We are lucky to have nice and noble friend.
Comment from donette1914
what a touching true story of dear friends and precious memories
so creative and heartfelt
outstanding
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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what a touching true story of dear friends and precious memories
so creative and heartfelt
outstanding
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting in this true story.
Comment from Susan Larson
What a sweet story. How blessed you were to have such a lovely snd lovable neighbor like Lois. It's nice that you have something special to remember her by.
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What a sweet story. How blessed you were to have such a lovely snd lovable neighbor like Lois. It's nice that you have something special to remember her by.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Susan.
Comment from rama devi
I love the sincere affection in this and the lovely AHA in the closing. It really captures the energy you shared! What a glow! Nice pacing, tone, POV, sentence constructions and details.
Two suggestions:
*she exhaled warmth
exuded instead of exhaled (optional, of course)
*The happy years, however, marked its steps
thier instead of its
Big hugs,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I love the sincere affection in this and the lovely AHA in the closing. It really captures the energy you shared! What a glow! Nice pacing, tone, POV, sentence constructions and details.
Two suggestions:
*she exhaled warmth
exuded instead of exhaled (optional, of course)
*The happy years, however, marked its steps
thier instead of its
Big hugs,
rd
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you, rd. Suggestions were taken.
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:-)
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Thank you, dear RD.
