Not Broken
Trigger warning: date rape6 total reviews
Comment from Goodadvicechan
This is a moving story. I feel sorry for the victim.
The story was well told. The ending is great... Making the phone call is the beginning of picking up the pieces.
Thank you for sharing with us.
Happy writing and good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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This is a moving story. I feel sorry for the victim.
The story was well told. The ending is great... Making the phone call is the beginning of picking up the pieces.
Thank you for sharing with us.
Happy writing and good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Thank you! I'm grateful for your comments and review. thank you for reading my story. Hugs.
Comment from Begin Again
Bravo! Bad things happen but that doesn't mean we have to take the blame for things out of our control. No does mean no! Great job! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Bravo! Bad things happen but that doesn't mean we have to take the blame for things out of our control. No does mean no! Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your support and thank you for reading and reviewing my story. Hugs!
Comment from LisaMay
You were thoughtful to put a trigger warning at the top. This terrible experience happens far too often to trusting and unsuspecting girls, or drunk ones that get taken advantage of.
Your story sends the right message that this behaviour should be reported and the man held responsible should be punished.
Your female character shows strength to overcome her undeserved guilt and embarrassment and looking towards her future where she is in charge.
"I have been victimized, but I will not be a victim" is very powerful.
Nodded does not seem to be the right choice of word in this line:
The heavy feeling of dread that nodded her stomach was gone.
Perhaps you mean 'knotted"?
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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You were thoughtful to put a trigger warning at the top. This terrible experience happens far too often to trusting and unsuspecting girls, or drunk ones that get taken advantage of.
Your story sends the right message that this behaviour should be reported and the man held responsible should be punished.
Your female character shows strength to overcome her undeserved guilt and embarrassment and looking towards her future where she is in charge.
"I have been victimized, but I will not be a victim" is very powerful.
Nodded does not seem to be the right choice of word in this line:
The heavy feeling of dread that nodded her stomach was gone.
Perhaps you mean 'knotted"?
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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Yes, I did! Thank you so much for catching that. I appreciate all your comments and your helpful review. Hugs.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
I work with a ministry called H-E-A-R-T (Hope Exists After Rape Trauma). This is a powerful story - that phone call is the first step to taking her life back. I was sexually abused for years as a child so I appreciate the warning that this might contain a trigger. Good luck in the contest.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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I work with a ministry called H-E-A-R-T (Hope Exists After Rape Trauma). This is a powerful story - that phone call is the first step to taking her life back. I was sexually abused for years as a child so I appreciate the warning that this might contain a trigger. Good luck in the contest.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your rating and review. Your supportive comments are appreciated greatly. Hugs!
Comment from kahpot
" dread that nodded her stomach..." "nodded" or knotted? this is a wonderful read and yes after such drama "picking up the pieces would be extremely hard, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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" dread that nodded her stomach..." "nodded" or knotted? this is a wonderful read and yes after such drama "picking up the pieces would be extremely hard, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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Thank you for catching that typo. I appreciate your comments and ratings. Hugs.
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have used the few words that you were given and written a fine story, although it presents a picture of something very unpleasant. I like the way you ended it, she is determined to pick up the pieces. Calling the police was the proper thing to do, since a lot of women do not report this type of thing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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You have used the few words that you were given and written a fine story, although it presents a picture of something very unpleasant. I like the way you ended it, she is determined to pick up the pieces. Calling the police was the proper thing to do, since a lot of women do not report this type of thing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your support, and for reading and reviewing my story. Humble appreciation to you. Hugs.
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You are welcome
