Starkness
Hidden hope grows silently in darkness16 total reviews
Comment from Susan X Smith
The image you chose is a perfect complement to the words, since both create a bleak picture that is somewhat depressing. The free verse style works well here, and I love the optimism of the last stanza.
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The image you chose is a perfect complement to the words, since both create a bleak picture that is somewhat depressing. The free verse style works well here, and I love the optimism of the last stanza.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from Earl Corp
I love the renewal of spring too. It's funny that something that looked dead all winter can come to life in the season of renewal. Very nice job. Stay safe and stay healthy.
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I love the renewal of spring too. It's funny that something that looked dead all winter can come to life in the season of renewal. Very nice job. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your involved review.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a great poem. Well-written, very interesting something we can all relate to. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. With these negative temperatures all this ice and snow, I'm beginning to wonder if we'll ever thaw.
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What a great poem. Well-written, very interesting something we can all relate to. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. With these negative temperatures all this ice and snow, I'm beginning to wonder if we'll ever thaw.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I agree about the need to thaw. The problem here, is stuff thaws, including me, during the day, then freezes up at night.
Comment from Mabaker12
You deserve every six you get Liz I admire poets to the highest I can't rhyme two words together so take a bow my clever friend, you earn your shiny one. Love U Anne
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You deserve every six you get Liz I admire poets to the highest I can't rhyme two words together so take a bow my clever friend, you earn your shiny one. Love U Anne
Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you Anne, for your enthusiastic review. You will notice this does not rhyme. I prefer free verse...no need to rhyme. I had a kid write my rhyming poems in my 1st year in high school. I got good marks.
I wrote my 1st poem as an adult ...not a rhyming poem for our domestic abuse newsletter in 1981. I'm not sure when I began writing rhyme...maybe when I turned poems into songs
Her Faith Story
His battering
hand- fist
Strikes out
tearing at the flesh
the heart
The darkness of her heart
Sees only violence
ugliness
fear
dispair
From the anguish
A Light shines in her heart
And God reveals
that deeper within
is
peace
beauty
love
and hope
And a place for this to grow-
Herstory
Liz K. O'Neill
July 1981
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It's actually a world peopled with ugliness
Liz and light and darkness grope around searching for satisfaction. Luv U Anne.
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Good thing we're in it to bring light to others through our writings.
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Thanks to you helping through the rough bits of my marriage I have just entered something from my past and it ain't pretty.
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Sadly, our past is never far away. Would writing about it help? You can share it with me when you're ready.
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Oh my dearest friend writing has helped over the years and I fall back on this God given gift time and time again. It's friends like you and Alie that keep my spine straight when at times I'd like a little hole to hide in, but friends like Wee bear help so much. I Luv U Anne
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Thank you.
Anytime you want to talk. Bea & I are here.
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Something is wrong with my machine Liz I think this is the third time I've seen this post. How about you?
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Ah, no this is an answer I've not seen before. I thank you my dear Liz, and I talk to you every day and I need your help. One writer to me my story showed I had developed into a bitter old woman. Go figure. I have attended enough A.A. meetings to avoid this very thing. Darned if I can work some people out. Insight? Luv u Anne.
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I've learned from my reading that I can work some out of my innards by doing what Eckhart Tolle says. To stop resisting what is. I use this analogy..I could be driving down a road & see a giant concrete wall blocking the whole road withno way around it. So I could ram my car into it. Bang my head against it, pound my fists on it, swear at it, sit on the ground by it.
OR turn about and find a different way.
I've had to redefine situations. Oh, some of thebold stuff comers back from time to time. But I've just redefines. I don't like the concept of 'accepting' . That's just not me. I like to think I just am stopping resisting. I feel I have a choice of what I do. Whereas 'acceptance' is inactivity. I just sit trying to accept something. I'm really just resisting. So if I want happiness I stop resisting. Eckhart Tolle says it is silly to resist what is. I couldn't argue with him so I stopped resisting. I have to remind myself of this when I get agitated, angry or sad.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your poem talks about lost times, about emptiness, but the last stanza breaks the darkness and roots hope: "
Ever so slowly
Newness emerg" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Your poem talks about lost times, about emptiness, but the last stanza breaks the darkness and roots hope: "
Ever so slowly
Newness emerg" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for you involved review.
Comment from lyenochka
Very cool! Loved how you used that picture to convey an emotional landscape and then you take it further by concluding "Newness emerges from weariness
Another chance"
I feel the hope of spring! Beautifully done!
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Very cool! Loved how you used that picture to convey an emotional landscape and then you take it further by concluding "Newness emerges from weariness
Another chance"
I feel the hope of spring! Beautifully done!
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for you involved review.
