Daylight
Waking thoughts.45 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi Amada,
I do like your Tanka. Your selected artwork (I like to use Cleo too!) and author's notes are just bonus attributes for your contest entry. Pleased this morning glimpse provided you inspiration for all of us to review.
Editorial comment: your ending period is unnecessary. IMHO your presentation would have an added punch if you increased your text size. Bolding your text is another option. Unfortunately, I am not a fan of italic script. Methinks it can be difficult to read.
Mark
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Hi Amada,
I do like your Tanka. Your selected artwork (I like to use Cleo too!) and author's notes are just bonus attributes for your contest entry. Pleased this morning glimpse provided you inspiration for all of us to review.
Editorial comment: your ending period is unnecessary. IMHO your presentation would have an added punch if you increased your text size. Bolding your text is another option. Unfortunately, I am not a fan of italic script. Methinks it can be difficult to read.
Mark
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Hi Mark, thank you so much for your great comments and suggestions. I respect your opinion. and I followed the suggestions. I also replaced the last line. I would be honored if you give it another look. Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your tanka is excellent in every respect. It vividly describes one specific, brief but powerful experience provided, just for you it seems, by nature.
Very lovely
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Your tanka is excellent in every respect. It vividly describes one specific, brief but powerful experience provided, just for you it seems, by nature.
Very lovely
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you Janice for your great comments.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello amada!
Such beautiful imagery is found in your well-crafted tanka. I so appreciate how a moment in your own life translated into the imagery and poetic offering presented.
One observation: You employ the word "fresh" twice. I am wondering if "new" or another suitable word could be employed?
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Hello amada!
Such beautiful imagery is found in your well-crafted tanka. I so appreciate how a moment in your own life translated into the imagery and poetic offering presented.
One observation: You employ the word "fresh" twice. I am wondering if "new" or another suitable word could be employed?
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Hi Diane, I truly appreciate your warm comments to my Tanka post.
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My pleasure!
Hoping I helped!
diane
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My pleasure!
Hoping I helped!
diane
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My pleasure!
Hoping I helped!
diane
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the picture that you choose to go with your poem, they are a prefect mach.T
You captured my attention from the start. That was moment you will never for get.
I experience something like that but the place was not so divine.
Thank you f sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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I love the picture that you choose to go with your poem, they are a prefect mach.T
You captured my attention from the start. That was moment you will never for get.
I experience something like that but the place was not so divine.
Thank you f sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Miss Cookie, tghat is exactly what happened; now, when I am sad, I do remember that light.
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Your welcome.
Take care
Cookie
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your poem is a delight to read, alongside your author's notes. The early morning light bursting through your curtains, enveloping you, and warming your heart. That you felt something that special, it could only be for you. Really lovely Tanka. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Your poem is a delight to read, alongside your author's notes. The early morning light bursting through your curtains, enveloping you, and warming your heart. That you felt something that special, it could only be for you. Really lovely Tanka. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Sandra.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A delightful poem expressing the effect of daylight once we open our eyes in the morning. It makes us realize our truths. Of what we can't see in the dark. Beautiful use of words. Good luck!
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A delightful poem expressing the effect of daylight once we open our eyes in the morning. It makes us realize our truths. Of what we can't see in the dark. Beautiful use of words. Good luck!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your delightful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A flash of light as the storm rages and offers some comfort as day breaks early and quells the long dark night, I enjoyed your journey here, very descriptive, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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A flash of light as the storm rages and offers some comfort as day breaks early and quells the long dark night, I enjoyed your journey here, very descriptive, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for commenting in this poem.
Comment from QC Poet
I find sunrises and sunsets make the best imagitive views to capture in my dust and horizons. Thank you for Sharing this poem offering. Beautifully written conforming to the Syllable count awesome subject matter to capture in the moonbeams. Blessings.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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I find sunrises and sunsets make the best imagitive views to capture in my dust and horizons. Thank you for Sharing this poem offering. Beautifully written conforming to the Syllable count awesome subject matter to capture in the moonbeams. Blessings.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading my work, OC Poet.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Light and dark dancing on the surface of the water: "radiant dawning
darts through my drowsy window
fresh beam in my dust
to each dark bend gives fresh light
along with its moonbeam leap." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Light and dark dancing on the surface of the water: "radiant dawning
darts through my drowsy window
fresh beam in my dust
to each dark bend gives fresh light
along with its moonbeam leap." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work, Iza.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Daylight', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! My fingers are crossed for you.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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'Daylight', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! My fingers are crossed for you.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Duchess...
amada, you're very welcome!
amada, you're very welcome .....
