Daylight
Waking thoughts.45 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Hello Nancy,
This is outstanding in my opinion. I like the way you gave emotions or feelings to inanimate objects (for example the drowsy window). Many people do this inadvertantly or without reason, but here we can sense it as a deliberate choice. Beautiful. Love Katherine xx
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Hello Nancy,
This is outstanding in my opinion. I like the way you gave emotions or feelings to inanimate objects (for example the drowsy window). Many people do this inadvertantly or without reason, but here we can sense it as a deliberate choice. Beautiful. Love Katherine xx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Hi Katherine, wow. Thank you so much for reading these three lines so deeply. I celebrate that you like it!
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a beautiful poem. You have well expressed the feeling of walking up in the morning to the ray of sunshine coming in your window. Any trials or problems that were there yesterday are forgotten, it is a brand new day.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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What a beautiful poem. You have well expressed the feeling of walking up in the morning to the ray of sunshine coming in your window. Any trials or problems that were there yesterday are forgotten, it is a brand new day.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your very special comments to my short poem, dear Anne.
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You are welcome
Comment from Ann Market
I love this poem. It's meaning is surprisingly versatile, from a physical light to someone being "that person" for you. This is wonderful! The form is lovely and pleasant to read. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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I love this poem. It's meaning is surprisingly versatile, from a physical light to someone being "that person" for you. This is wonderful! The form is lovely and pleasant to read. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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It's so great to read these beautiful comments,Ann.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written tanka poem. Radiant dawning darts through my drowsy window . fresh beam in my dust. Beautiful photo. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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This is a nicely written tanka poem. Radiant dawning darts through my drowsy window . fresh beam in my dust. Beautiful photo. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Joanne.
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely post, further enhanced by your explanation of the context. I would leave it as it is, no rhyme, as I feel it expresses your thoughts well and clearly, and asks the reader to think of the application. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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A lovely post, further enhanced by your explanation of the context. I would leave it as it is, no rhyme, as I feel it expresses your thoughts well and clearly, and asks the reader to think of the application. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Hi Wendy, thank you for your great comments. Many times there is a little story behind your lines. A nice personal touch.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
A good choice of a picture of this poem. I like the contents of the poem: "radiant dawning darts through my drowsy window, fresh beam in my dust to each dark bend gives new light, it mends my broken center..."
Lights always reflect the bright side of things. I am glad the poem shares that view too
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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A good choice of a picture of this poem. I like the contents of the poem: "radiant dawning darts through my drowsy window, fresh beam in my dust to each dark bend gives new light, it mends my broken center..."
Lights always reflect the bright side of things. I am glad the poem shares that view too
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work and your great compliments.
Comment from donette1914
very creative and talented
your brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable and the photo goes well
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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very creative and talented
your brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable and the photo goes well
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your gracious comments, Donette.
Comment from Possummagic
This is a lovely heartfelt poem and I really enjoyed reading it. The artwork is great too, I love how the black and white captures the sparkle in the water. Nice!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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This is a lovely heartfelt poem and I really enjoyed reading it. The artwork is great too, I love how the black and white captures the sparkle in the water. Nice!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your grat comments, Possummagic.
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You?re welcome
Comment from DonandVicki
The last two lines of your poem were the most powerful for me."
"to each dark bend gives new light
it mends my broken center"
There is allways light even at the darkest hour.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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The last two lines of your poem were the most powerful for me."
"to each dark bend gives new light
it mends my broken center"
There is allways light even at the darkest hour.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the great review, Joanna.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words are well-chosen with special meaning for you. However, you expressed that in a way others can appreciate. Good job with the style of tanka. The image is perfect for your poem. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Your words are well-chosen with special meaning for you. However, you expressed that in a way others can appreciate. Good job with the style of tanka. The image is perfect for your poem. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work, Jan.
