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Macho

a short poem

6 total reviews 
Comment from rhonnie69
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GROWL! ROAR!
CIAO MISS LIONESS: Over the years...
I have grown a long, thick, full beard.
Does that count?

My girlfriend thinks that I am awesome.

Oh Yeah...

And plus I'm brown.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2021

Comment from Mark D. R.
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Tempeste,

Cute idea for 'mane.' Unsure if middle line is not a double entendre with your last line, but even if not, your meaning is expressive. We male lions are most handsome (-;

Mark

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2021

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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When one can make a presentation of a photo and words that say so much
succinctly, that is talent. A very well-chosen photo to render your message. Nicely done.

Ralf

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2021

reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
    Sorry for the late reply..

    thank you for the kind review .. I appreciate it

    I found the pic first which then inspired the wee poem.
Comment from judiverse
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Very creative. I like the "mane" spelling. Isn't it odd that in the critter world the males always get the most adornment? The lion in the picture must be quite a winner, by the look of his mane. Macho makes a good title, as it describes the male lion very well. Best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2021

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This made me smile as these animals have to fight for the favours of the female and it seems to be the same in the human world too, fine words that made me smile here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2021

Comment from Susan Newell
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This is wonderful. I love it when 5-7-5 poems don't end up being about flowers and sunshine and dew. You have told a great story with very few words. I love the title. Just my humble opinion, but I don't think you need the caps -- more subtle, but still clever, without.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2021

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
    Thanks for you review and helpful suggestion ..

    I wasn?t that convinced myself and have edited out the caps.

    Yes , I agree with you .. 5-7-5 about flowers at times can get a bit tedious.

    I try to present different themes to surprise and delight the reader.

    Keep safe!
reply by Susan Newell on 11-Feb-2021
    And so you did delight and surprise! Sometimes you have to trust your gut when it says, "No, you don't need that." :-) Or so experience tells me.