Remember when......
A simple time with a simple lifestyle13 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
Yes, I remember when. When we finished our homework, we could go out to play jump rope, jacks, or take our roller skates outside. After dinner, my family would watch a TV show together. Your poem is a well written and creative expression of those long-gone days. Thanks for the reminder. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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Yes, I remember when. When we finished our homework, we could go out to play jump rope, jacks, or take our roller skates outside. After dinner, my family would watch a TV show together. Your poem is a well written and creative expression of those long-gone days. Thanks for the reminder. Best wishes in the contest.
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Comment from Judy Lawless
You've conveyed the sentiments of many in this poem about your memories of the past. It's true that if technology hadn't limited human contact so much, for many, people would care more for each other. There needs to be a balance, because technology also has many advantages.
Well done.
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You've conveyed the sentiments of many in this poem about your memories of the past. It's true that if technology hadn't limited human contact so much, for many, people would care more for each other. There needs to be a balance, because technology also has many advantages.
Well done.
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Comment from Paul Borders
Oh good grief, I get so tired of seeing really good poems towards the bottom of the vote. Your entry received my vote. Well done and I can relate in so many ways.
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Oh good grief, I get so tired of seeing really good poems towards the bottom of the vote. Your entry received my vote. Well done and I can relate in so many ways.
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Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture and certainly remember those days...
Technology may not make people happy. They make things done more conveniently....
I agree with what you said in the poem.
Thank you for sharing.
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I like the picture and certainly remember those days...
Technology may not make people happy. They make things done more conveniently....
I agree with what you said in the poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2021
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Comment from Patty Palmer
Great poem! Taking me back to those days when we played jump rope in the yard and jacks on the back porch. Playing all day long going home for lunch, then knowing to be home in time for supper, 5:00, I think every family I knew at supper at 5:00! Like you, I'm glad I grew up in the era I did. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
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Great poem! Taking me back to those days when we played jump rope in the yard and jacks on the back porch. Playing all day long going home for lunch, then knowing to be home in time for supper, 5:00, I think every family I knew at supper at 5:00! Like you, I'm glad I grew up in the era I did. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Growing up years ago was not so complicated. Now we have all the modern technology out there, thats become complicated. We need to go to some school, so we know how to use it.
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Growing up years ago was not so complicated. Now we have all the modern technology out there, thats become complicated. We need to go to some school, so we know how to use it.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
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Comment from Anne Johnston
Your poem about the good old days brings back a lot of memories. Very good rhyming and great picture to illustrate. You are right about kids not spending time outside like we used to.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Your poem about the good old days brings back a lot of memories. Very good rhyming and great picture to illustrate. You are right about kids not spending time outside like we used to.
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Comment from Pantygynt
As another old fogey, I appreciated this poetic creation of a series of images, with the use if internal rhyme within each couplet.
I did feel the length of the lines was a bit daunting and would suggest this would be remedied with shorter lines, perhaps forming quatrains or even varied length stanzas.
This couplet needs to be a single sentence, with a comma rather than a period after 'morning'. That would make 'We' the subject of the second half so the 'was' should be a 'were' to obtain number agreement..
'We had opening devotions every morning. And was taught to practice the Golden Rule.'
I seriously thought of awarding four stars but relented in the end as the only real error is that grammatical one I mentioned last. Line length is a matter of opinion.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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As another old fogey, I appreciated this poetic creation of a series of images, with the use if internal rhyme within each couplet.
I did feel the length of the lines was a bit daunting and would suggest this would be remedied with shorter lines, perhaps forming quatrains or even varied length stanzas.
This couplet needs to be a single sentence, with a comma rather than a period after 'morning'. That would make 'We' the subject of the second half so the 'was' should be a 'were' to obtain number agreement..
'We had opening devotions every morning. And was taught to practice the Golden Rule.'
I seriously thought of awarding four stars but relented in the end as the only real error is that grammatical one I mentioned last. Line length is a matter of opinion.
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Comment from RodG
The Speaker reminds us of how "back in the day" life was more simple and carefree for kids and values were taught in school and at home, whereas today kids are addicted to technology. The closing stanza nicely emphasizes the difference between now and then. Rod
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The Speaker reminds us of how "back in the day" life was more simple and carefree for kids and values were taught in school and at home, whereas today kids are addicted to technology. The closing stanza nicely emphasizes the difference between now and then. Rod
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Comment from equestrik
This is a good presentation for the 'Good Old Days' poetry contest. i remember those days well and can relate to your writing. Best to you in the contest.
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This is a good presentation for the 'Good Old Days' poetry contest. i remember those days well and can relate to your writing. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
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