Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Mirror Mirror"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Bill Schott
This octelle, Mirror Mirror, has the proper formatting and leaves me with two separate meanings. The idea that we feel youn are young, but seem old.g but have aged, or that we
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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This octelle, Mirror Mirror, has the proper formatting and leaves me with two separate meanings. The idea that we feel youn are young, but seem old.g but have aged, or that we
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Bill, you are spot without assessment and comments.
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The idea that we feel young but have aged, or that we are young, but seem old.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, less of the glaring light of day does help one to look a bit younger! Unfortunately that is just an illusion. A clever piece for the Octelle week. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Yes, less of the glaring light of day does help one to look a bit younger! Unfortunately that is just an illusion. A clever piece for the Octelle week. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Wendy, thanks for the review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Whimsical and wry humor--I feel your pain--what's wrong with mirrors these days--why oh why must they tell the truth? I'd just as soon not see any clearer!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Whimsical and wry humor--I feel your pain--what's wrong with mirrors these days--why oh why must they tell the truth? I'd just as soon not see any clearer!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Elizabeth, thanks for sharing in this look into the mirror.
Comment from Begin Again
How quickly time marches on and the vision in the mirror changes to our horror. We either become a family member and wonder how that could be or simply say - that's not me! Well done - Smiles to you!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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How quickly time marches on and the vision in the mirror changes to our horror. We either become a family member and wonder how that could be or simply say - that's not me! Well done - Smiles to you!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thanks much!
Comment from Susan Newell
I skipped this the first time around, because I was uneasy about the tense jumping. But upon reading it a couple of times, I see that it was intended. I, too, keep looking for that young face, but it's in the other mirror. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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I skipped this the first time around, because I was uneasy about the tense jumping. But upon reading it a couple of times, I see that it was intended. I, too, keep looking for that young face, but it's in the other mirror. :-)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Susan, thanks for giving a second read, as it was intended. Yes where did that young person go?
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That young person is inside a nasty shell that develops from an incurable virus called aging.
Comment from Ann Market
Lol, this is written wonderfully! This poem reads so smoothly and easily. The rhythm is very nice and the rhyming is quite pleasant! The form is lovely, too.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Lol, this is written wonderfully! This poem reads so smoothly and easily. The rhythm is very nice and the rhyming is quite pleasant! The form is lovely, too.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thanks Ann.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
What we see, may not be what we like to see.
Mirror Mirror
by JLR
Good job with the syllables count and the rhyme scheme. The topic is eerie and I love it. Cool picture too. Great entry for the Potlatch Poetry OCTELLE event challenge.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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What we see, may not be what we like to see.
Mirror Mirror
by JLR
Good job with the syllables count and the rhyme scheme. The topic is eerie and I love it. Cool picture too. Great entry for the Potlatch Poetry OCTELLE event challenge.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thank you friend.
Comment from amada
Wow, this poem has mch life, strenght, and maybe, even anger. Very good descriptions of human emotions, written very well in great rhyming schemes. Congratulations in writing this new style of poetry.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Wow, this poem has mch life, strenght, and maybe, even anger. Very good descriptions of human emotions, written very well in great rhyming schemes. Congratulations in writing this new style of poetry.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Amada, thank you very much, I enjoyed this challenge.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Great poem - and it speaks to me. I'm stunned at the old woman who looks back at me when I look in the mirror. I'm often tempted to change the lighting.
Your poem tells the tale well, within a stringent format.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Great poem - and it speaks to me. I'm stunned at the old woman who looks back at me when I look in the mirror. I'm often tempted to change the lighting.
Your poem tells the tale well, within a stringent format.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
What a wonderful use of rhyme and repetition. You create a very specific and personal moment that we all can relate to when reflecting upon ourselves.
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What a wonderful use of rhyme and repetition. You create a very specific and personal moment that we all can relate to when reflecting upon ourselves.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you left hand scribe.
