Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Falling Green Leaves"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your richtameter is excellent in all respects--accurate in formation and vivid in its use of onomatopoeia in describing the rushing water and its effects. The title caught my eye because I always think of gold, red, and autumn when I think of falling leaves.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Your richtameter is excellent in all respects--accurate in formation and vivid in its use of onomatopoeia in describing the rushing water and its effects. The title caught my eye because I always think of gold, red, and autumn when I think of falling leaves.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and validation.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a very creative entry in the contest. I especially like the word "whooshing" which is applied in the beginning to the creek, and in the end, to the leaves. This poem has great imagery if only reading the words, but is enhanced by the artwork. The is a great presentation.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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This is a very creative entry in the contest. I especially like the word "whooshing" which is applied in the beginning to the creek, and in the end, to the leaves. This poem has great imagery if only reading the words, but is enhanced by the artwork. The is a great presentation.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Lorraine,thank you for the validation on this poem.
Comment from Rosalie Lawrence
I love the mathematical possibilities of the rictameter. You have found just the right combination to create as onomatopoeia with your whoosing, watery words - even though my dictionary says neither 'whoosing' nor 'rictometer' are actually words. LOL Write on!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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I love the mathematical possibilities of the rictameter. You have found just the right combination to create as onomatopoeia with your whoosing, watery words - even though my dictionary says neither 'whoosing' nor 'rictometer' are actually words. LOL Write on!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Rosalie, thanks for the review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In this Rictameter poem the poet has shown how the green tree leaves do fall in Nature seasonally and they all do dance for being happy to invite the next season or they dance being glad for changes; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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In this Rictameter poem the poet has shown how the green tree leaves do fall in Nature seasonally and they all do dance for being happy to invite the next season or they dance being glad for changes; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Susan Newell
Very nicely written. I like the image of the water misting up to meet the falling leaves. The rictameter is a form I haven't yet tried. Maybe I'll attempt to discipline myself.
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Very nicely written. I like the image of the water misting up to meet the falling leaves. The rictameter is a form I haven't yet tried. Maybe I'll attempt to discipline myself.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Susan,I shall be looking forward to your attempt.👍
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Don't hold your breath.😀
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Okay. I wrote one, but I'm too late for the contest because I've already posted twice today. I'll have to hold it in reserve.
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Great, I will watch for it!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Nice! I certainly got a great sense of what was going on with this small stream in its dash down to find a bigger body of water to meet. *smile* You used really good, active verbs and great imagery. Good luck!
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Nice! I certainly got a great sense of what was going on with this small stream in its dash down to find a bigger body of water to meet. *smile* You used really good, active verbs and great imagery. Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much🙏
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this poetry contest my friend, the wording is language rich, and the syllable count per line is accurate, this is sure to do well, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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This is an excellent entry in this poetry contest my friend, the wording is language rich, and the syllable count per line is accurate, this is sure to do well, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you Roy, I hope your week is going well..
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It is, thank you.
Comment from RodG
This is a very well-written Rictameter. We get a vivid picture of both the rushing creek and the "falling, twirling" leaves. Your opening/closing refrain really works at giving us a sense of motion. A solid entry in this contest. Rod
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This is a very well-written Rictameter. We get a vivid picture of both the rushing creek and the "falling, twirling" leaves. Your opening/closing refrain really works at giving us a sense of motion. A solid entry in this contest. Rod
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you Rod!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I think you have a winner here, I like how you give nature humans attributes and feelings - cascading over a gentle
depression, spewing a heavy wet mist
skyward, to seemingly collide
with featherlike green leaves
falling, twirling
whooshing.... -Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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I think you have a winner here, I like how you give nature humans attributes and feelings - cascading over a gentle
depression, spewing a heavy wet mist
skyward, to seemingly collide
with featherlike green leaves
falling, twirling
whooshing.... -Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Iza, I am so honored with your six - star validation. Thank you🙏🙏😝
