Another Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "A woman's rage"American Isekai
9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This episode was action packed and a bit amusing. What a great surprise the reader had as Christa went into action. I'm glad she didn't just let him run away. I don't think that other intruder is returning anytime soon. Moohaha
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This episode was action packed and a bit amusing. What a great surprise the reader had as Christa went into action. I'm glad she didn't just let him run away. I don't think that other intruder is returning anytime soon. Moohaha
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
Comment from w.j.debi
You know how to do an action scene. Wow. I haven't come across this story before, but I may have to retrace it back to the beginning. The characters are engaging. I already care about Crista and Pam. Looks like these girls are not to be messed with, especially Crista.
Missing word?
"Unfortunately, if he is not here, we've been paid [to] leave him a message," said the talker; he nodded to one of his companions.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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You know how to do an action scene. Wow. I haven't come across this story before, but I may have to retrace it back to the beginning. The characters are engaging. I already care about Crista and Pam. Looks like these girls are not to be messed with, especially Crista.
Missing word?
"Unfortunately, if he is not here, we've been paid [to] leave him a message," said the talker; he nodded to one of his companions.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from robyn corum
Lancellot,
uuuhhh.. I guess not. Beaten by two tiny girls? I don't think I'd admit that either. And go back? Ummm... no. Probably not the best course of action, either. This was so much fun! Thank you!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Lancellot,
uuuhhh.. I guess not. Beaten by two tiny girls? I don't think I'd admit that either. And go back? Ummm... no. Probably not the best course of action, either. This was so much fun! Thank you!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Robyn.
Comment from Jay Squires
You really excel in the action sequences
Pam's dress and nick the soft skin of her ample breasts. [I've got mixed feelings about this line. The important point is that the dagger nicked her breast. Is it a time to make her look alluring?]
"I believe you. I believe you," Crista screamed, [I don't understand why she is saying this as she stabbed the man. Did it have to do with his threat? Or what she remembered from when Paul killed Joqumoe? It just seems an odd thing to be chanting as she killed.
Always entertaining.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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You really excel in the action sequences
Pam's dress and nick the soft skin of her ample breasts. [I've got mixed feelings about this line. The important point is that the dagger nicked her breast. Is it a time to make her look alluring?]
"I believe you. I believe you," Crista screamed, [I don't understand why she is saying this as she stabbed the man. Did it have to do with his threat? Or what she remembered from when Paul killed Joqumoe? It just seems an odd thing to be chanting as she killed.
Always entertaining.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Yes, she is chanting that because that is why Paul killed Joq. She is still a teen and seeing that killing left scars much like what happened with Raymond when he was young.
Actually, I didn't think of that line with Pam as alluring. I suppose it is. I was thinking because her breasts were large she could avoid the tip of the dagger, and because they were soft, she was easily cut. But, maybe I was over thinking it.
Thank you, Jay. I will look at those closer.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear lancellot, Even if she screams like a woman, we now know Crisra will fight. Probably fight until she is dead, if necessary. Once Paul has had time to train her more, she will be an awesome warrior.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Dear lancellot, Even if she screams like a woman, we now know Crisra will fight. Probably fight until she is dead, if necessary. Once Paul has had time to train her more, she will be an awesome warrior.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Yes, in the next book, she is quite formidable.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! Okay, I literally have no idea of plot or characters and such here, Sir Lancelot, but what a well-written chapter with wonderful situational presentation and great emotional characters!! Thanx for sharing and best of luck with your book! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Wow! Okay, I literally have no idea of plot or characters and such here, Sir Lancelot, but what a well-written chapter with wonderful situational presentation and great emotional characters!! Thanx for sharing and best of luck with your book! :) Yvette
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
lancellot:
If a 10-pound girl killed the other two assassins with me, I would
not be telling anyone I was there, either, as I would be the laughing
stock of the entire place. Besides that, there's likely a noose with
his name on it for violating the Earl's land.
Rdfrdmoom2
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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lancellot:
If a 10-pound girl killed the other two assassins with me, I would
not be telling anyone I was there, either, as I would be the laughing
stock of the entire place. Besides that, there's likely a noose with
his name on it for violating the Earl's land.
Rdfrdmoom2
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from judiverse
How quickly things can change. Crista and Pam were having some girl talk when they are suddenly menaced by the two men who are bent on seeking revenge, and they don't seem to mind who they kill. If Paul isn't there, they'll settle for Crista. The talker wants Paul to pay for killing his brother when Paul rescued Crista. Crista is brave to tackle the men, but she's had a bit of training on what to do. She saves her life and Pam's, too. I like the way you're developing Crista. You are now showing so much more to her than the slave. judi
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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How quickly things can change. Crista and Pam were having some girl talk when they are suddenly menaced by the two men who are bent on seeking revenge, and they don't seem to mind who they kill. If Paul isn't there, they'll settle for Crista. The talker wants Paul to pay for killing his brother when Paul rescued Crista. Crista is brave to tackle the men, but she's had a bit of training on what to do. She saves her life and Pam's, too. I like the way you're developing Crista. You are now showing so much more to her than the slave. judi
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Judi. I see I need to make that clearer. The men are there to kill the Earl. They just happen upon Pam and Crista after killing a guard.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Crista is not to be messed with, is she. I'm glad Paul taught her to defend herself. I am wondering if there will be any repercussions to her actions. This story gets more and more interesting.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Crista is not to be messed with, is she. I'm glad Paul taught her to defend herself. I am wondering if there will be any repercussions to her actions. This story gets more and more interesting.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much. You're right. She will get a lot bolder after this.
