Winter Hangs On
Time to let go but...9 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Nolen
This is really good. It is a hard type of poem in my opinion. But you nailed it. It even made sense. I attempted this and the first try I was not successful. I did not fully meet the requirements. I had to redo it.
Anyway, this was great. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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This is really good. It is a hard type of poem in my opinion. But you nailed it. It even made sense. I attempted this and the first try I was not successful. I did not fully meet the requirements. I had to redo it.
Anyway, this was great. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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I did too. My first attempt was wrong as a reviewer pointed out, I was grateful for her advice. Thank you for reading my poem. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You use the literary techniques well. Your alliteration becomes onomatopoetic sounding like the wind. This poem needs to be read aloud. Your animation will draw the reader in to identify or to experience it vicariously or viscerally.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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You use the literary techniques well. Your alliteration becomes onomatopoetic sounding like the wind. This poem needs to be read aloud. Your animation will draw the reader in to identify or to experience it vicariously or viscerally.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Wendy G
A well written poem of this genre, and you have fulfilled all the conditions.Your work is supported and inspired by a beautiful image as well. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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A well written poem of this genre, and you have fulfilled all the conditions.Your work is supported and inspired by a beautiful image as well. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading my entry, I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Tyburn poetry contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. You followed the rules with excellent word choices. It flows pretty good. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Tyburn poetry contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. You followed the rules with excellent word choices. It flows pretty good. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thanks .
Comment from AprilViolet
Brrrrr! Winter does seem to hang on doesn't it? Love your poem and the picture you chose. Definitely seems to sum up winter's grip! I can not wait until spring. Six stars!!!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Brrrrr! Winter does seem to hang on doesn't it? Love your poem and the picture you chose. Definitely seems to sum up winter's grip! I can not wait until spring. Six stars!!!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you for those lovely 6 stars. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
I love the picture you have painted here with your words. You have done an excellent job with such a hard style of poetry. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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I love the picture you have painted here with your words. You have done an excellent job with such a hard style of poetry. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review and 6 star rating. :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, Winter can not be done soon enough! ;) Your syllable count is well done, but your first lines do not all rhyme: coldness does not rhyme with the other three words... I would be happy to re-review when you've re-worked it... ;) :) Thanx for sharing and good luck! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Oh, Winter can not be done soon enough! ;) Your syllable count is well done, but your first lines do not all rhyme: coldness does not rhyme with the other three words... I would be happy to re-review when you've re-worked it... ;) :) Thanx for sharing and good luck! ;)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for pointing out my error, it's fixed now and I appreciate your help...I'd be grateful if you took another look. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your animated image works great with your poem, Mystery author. Your words flow well. I know the contest rules state 'near rhymes'. However, I believe coldness isn't one. I'll let the CEC judge that one.
May I suggest:
Snowing,
Growing.
Coldness, [ blowing ]
flowing.
Winter hangs on, snowing, growing high,
winds from the north, coldness flowing by. [ flowing blowing by ]
Best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Your animated image works great with your poem, Mystery author. Your words flow well. I know the contest rules state 'near rhymes'. However, I believe coldness isn't one. I'll let the CEC judge that one.
May I suggest:
Snowing,
Growing.
Coldness, [ blowing ]
flowing.
Winter hangs on, snowing, growing high,
winds from the north, coldness flowing by. [ flowing blowing by ]
Best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thanks for your wise suggestion..I took it and it's thanks to you that I won't be disqualified. I found the whole thing a little confusing, it's my first time doing this contest. Thank you so much for your help. :)
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This style is tricky to write right.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Oh, awesome! You tried the Tyburn. I was too chicken to do it. Seems rather difficult, but yours turned out great.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Oh, awesome! You tried the Tyburn. I was too chicken to do it. Seems rather difficult, but yours turned out great.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you. I messed up a few times until I fiqured it out..it still might be wrong!..lol. Thank you for this great review. :)
