The Magic Fountain
Up on Tower Mountain, lies...22 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice quest, we elves, sorceress, cursed sister, monsters, and then justice is being done and the bad sorceress is going to be banished and punished in a second:"
The mighty Elf Queen set scouts out to find,
the sorcerer who'd cursed young Emmaline.
So, he no longer could do others harm,
Kingdom to Kingdom, she spread the alarm.
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Nice quest, we elves, sorceress, cursed sister, monsters, and then justice is being done and the bad sorceress is going to be banished and punished in a second:"
The mighty Elf Queen set scouts out to find,
the sorcerer who'd cursed young Emmaline.
So, he no longer could do others harm,
Kingdom to Kingdom, she spread the alarm.
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review, I always like hearing from you. :)
Comment from tfawcus
Love your entry for the epic fantasy contest. No prizes for guessing who wrote it! LOL. I hope it delights the judges and your grandson equally.
I certainly enjoyed it. You've done a wonderful job with this. Good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Love your entry for the epic fantasy contest. No prizes for guessing who wrote it! LOL. I hope it delights the judges and your grandson equally.
I certainly enjoyed it. You've done a wonderful job with this. Good luck!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Hi..thank you for this wonderful review. You probably think I'm someone else because of the hero character's name. I actually don't have and grandchildren yet and used the name of a young fellow Fanstory writer who has a lot of enthusiasm. Thank you again for this positive review. :)
Comment from greyson ernst
this is so very incredible i did not know you could do a poem because it said epic fantasy story but as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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this is so very incredible i did not know you could do a poem because it said epic fantasy story but as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this nice review. It actually said Story Poem, a story told in poetry of any kind..rhyming, free verse ,etc..I hope you don't mind I used your name for my main character...I really like your name. :)
Comment from Leann DS
Great story with a happy ending! Lovely rhyme and attractive rhythm. I enjoyed your work overall, and I'm glad that Emmaline made it and that the bad guys were banished. hugs!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Great story with a happy ending! Lovely rhyme and attractive rhythm. I enjoyed your work overall, and I'm glad that Emmaline made it and that the bad guys were banished. hugs!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this lovely review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Excellent fantasy story poem, I really enjoyed it! "Now all is happy in the castle keep,/for Emmaline is no longer asleep." Of course, a perfect ending as well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Excellent fantasy story poem, I really enjoyed it! "Now all is happy in the castle keep,/for Emmaline is no longer asleep." Of course, a perfect ending as well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review. :)
Comment from AprilViolet
Such imagination and magic went into the writing of this poem. This is definitely a poem I would love to read to children as it is engaging and possesses a certain level of wonderment for young and old alike. Love it! Great job!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Such imagination and magic went into the writing of this poem. This is definitely a poem I would love to read to children as it is engaging and possesses a certain level of wonderment for young and old alike. Love it! Great job!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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You are awesome! Thank you for this wonderful review. It made my night. :)
Comment from RodG
This epic fantasy has all the classic elements of a hero's quest. The gallant Greyson seeks water from a magic fountain on Tower Mountain and must fight a monster to get it. He rescues her in the nick of time. I will never be a fan of AABB rhyming, but I did enjoy your tale. Rod
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This epic fantasy has all the classic elements of a hero's quest. The gallant Greyson seeks water from a magic fountain on Tower Mountain and must fight a monster to get it. He rescues her in the nick of time. I will never be a fan of AABB rhyming, but I did enjoy your tale. Rod
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from poetwatch
Oh, Knight in shining armor you did write free and save the damsel in duress. You charger the monster with a blade and true to heart an Elf Queen sang soft melodies that soothe the monster to sleep. Good story, author. :) This is a good entry for the Epic Fantasy Story Poem Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Before I forget, in the second stanza, "knew that truth that Emmaline,"?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Oh, Knight in shining armor you did write free and save the damsel in duress. You charger the monster with a blade and true to heart an Elf Queen sang soft melodies that soothe the monster to sleep. Good story, author. :) This is a good entry for the Epic Fantasy Story Poem Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Before I forget, in the second stanza, "knew that truth that Emmaline,"?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you also for correcting my mistake. :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
The knight rescues the damsel in distress... midst monsters and evil wizards and even an elf queen - yep, I'd say you have the 'epic fantasy' nailed! You have a good rhyme scheme to your tale, but your rhythm tends to stumble in spots... Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
he has no choice --> he had no choice
not along as you --> not alone as you
gone,he's doomed --> gone, he's doomed
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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The knight rescues the damsel in distress... midst monsters and evil wizards and even an elf queen - yep, I'd say you have the 'epic fantasy' nailed! You have a good rhyme scheme to your tale, but your rhythm tends to stumble in spots... Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
he has no choice --> he had no choice
not along as you --> not alone as you
gone,he's doomed --> gone, he's doomed
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for pointing out the errors in my poem and for your nice comments. :)
Comment from lancellot
A very good story in poetic form. I don't what other contest entries there will be, but I can tell this will not be easily bested. The story flowed well, and the rhymes and near rhymes read effortlessly. The sorcerer losing his power, did come without warning or reason though.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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A very good story in poetic form. I don't what other contest entries there will be, but I can tell this will not be easily bested. The story flowed well, and the rhymes and near rhymes read effortlessly. The sorcerer losing his power, did come without warning or reason though.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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You are absolutely right! What was I thinking? Of course the Elf Queen will take care of this. Check back later and let me know what you think. Thank you for helping me improve my poem. :)
