Time To Pause And Reflect
We are in a dangerous stage71 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Rioters take to the street to disrespect our nation by creating havoc everywhere. It is time for everyone to step back and get a new perspective on life instead of trying to tear tear lives apart in unrest. We need to find a common ground to end this horrible out come. The problem just won't fix itself. We must come together and unite and respect our flag and each other.People quit creating caous.
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Rioters take to the street to disrespect our nation by creating havoc everywhere. It is time for everyone to step back and get a new perspective on life instead of trying to tear tear lives apart in unrest. We need to find a common ground to end this horrible out come. The problem just won't fix itself. We must come together and unite and respect our flag and each other.People quit creating caous.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Jaybird, a good poem asking a relevant question 'How long can we, this freedom keep? Tis is very well written in very good aabb rhyme. You fear for your country - I don't think you are alone in that respect, but you have worded your poetry with words that indicate you are full of hope.
The poem is well constructed with eight syllables per line throughout. The couplet line 'The fear I have causes me to weep-' - maybe 'caused' would keep the eight syllable line - but a mere detail on a very good, well written poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hello Jaybird, a good poem asking a relevant question 'How long can we, this freedom keep? Tis is very well written in very good aabb rhyme. You fear for your country - I don't think you are alone in that respect, but you have worded your poetry with words that indicate you are full of hope.
The poem is well constructed with eight syllables per line throughout. The couplet line 'The fear I have causes me to weep-' - maybe 'caused' would keep the eight syllable line - but a mere detail on a very good, well written poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Victoria...
Nicely done. Is this a sonnet? I live in Appalachia also, in the eastern part of TN that was once the State of Franklin. In your third stanza, the word "symbol" is misspelled.
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Nicely done. Is this a sonnet? I live in Appalachia also, in the eastern part of TN that was once the State of Franklin. In your third stanza, the word "symbol" is misspelled.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from royowen
I don't people understand what freedom is. I believe freedom is being able to love God, and each other, but when some think freedom is imposing that on my neighbour, then that freedom becomes anarchy. But beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
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I don't people understand what freedom is. I believe freedom is being able to love God, and each other, but when some think freedom is imposing that on my neighbour, then that freedom becomes anarchy. But beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from nancyjam
I agreed with your thoughts in this well crafted poem.
We are facing troubling times, I believe, but hopefully there are enough
patriotic and sensible people to see that things don't go too wrong.
Nancy
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I agreed with your thoughts in this well crafted poem.
We are facing troubling times, I believe, but hopefully there are enough
patriotic and sensible people to see that things don't go too wrong.
Nancy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Kristine Laco
Jaybird1,
This poem is full of pain and hope. Congratulations!
I don't read a lot of poetry and understand the poetic license, so the spelling of 'blest' made sense. Why 'symbal' though? Just curious.
Thanks for sharing.
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Jaybird1,
This poem is full of pain and hope. Congratulations!
I don't read a lot of poetry and understand the poetic license, so the spelling of 'blest' made sense. Why 'symbal' though? Just curious.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I UNDERSTAND YOUR POEM, YOU ARE NOT ALONE. YOU CAPTURED MY ATTENTION FROM THE START
ALL WE CAN DO IS PRAY AND HE WILL TAKE CARE OF US.
HAVE A SAFE AND BLESSED DAY
COOKIE
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I UNDERSTAND YOUR POEM, YOU ARE NOT ALONE. YOU CAPTURED MY ATTENTION FROM THE START
ALL WE CAN DO IS PRAY AND HE WILL TAKE CARE OF US.
HAVE A SAFE AND BLESSED DAY
COOKIE
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very thoughtful and insightful poem. We do need to be more reflective in our direction. The hate speech and lies only poison the country's well being.
As usual, I appreciate your wisdom.
Regards,
Mary
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Very thoughtful and insightful poem. We do need to be more reflective in our direction. The hate speech and lies only poison the country's well being.
As usual, I appreciate your wisdom.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
You are so right that these are troubled times and you expressed that thought eloquently in your poem:
"How long can we, this freedom keep?"
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
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You are so right that these are troubled times and you expressed that thought eloquently in your poem:
"How long can we, this freedom keep?"
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It does seem that deep thought is missing. Some of the policies that are being cancelled and others being introduced are downright stupid. God help those who are being unfairly targeted by opinionated companies and Social Media.
Ralf
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It does seem that deep thought is missing. Some of the policies that are being cancelled and others being introduced are downright stupid. God help those who are being unfairly targeted by opinionated companies and Social Media.
Ralf
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
