God And Man
A Spiritual Poem; Contest Over; Edited Today119 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Very interesting image that you chose to complement your poem. I think this has been the only time that I have seen Christ and Krishna together. Nice four line Acrostic.
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Very interesting image that you chose to complement your poem. I think this has been the only time that I have seen Christ and Krishna together. Nice four line Acrostic.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Wendy G
It is a well written poem, and it could apply to many religions. It is certain that only God, being God, knows all the hidden thoughts of mankind. Thanks for your thought-provoking piece of writing.
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It is a well written poem, and it could apply to many religions. It is certain that only God, being God, knows all the hidden thoughts of mankind. Thanks for your thought-provoking piece of writing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from victor 66
No, I don't believe in God. And, I don't fault anyone that does. I do believe whatever I have done that was wrong can't be forgiven. Even if it could be forgiven, how does it really make anything better? I respect your philosophy and religion, and to some degree I wish it were true. But I don't believe so. Best wishes.
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No, I don't believe in God. And, I don't fault anyone that does. I do believe whatever I have done that was wrong can't be forgiven. Even if it could be forgiven, how does it really make anything better? I respect your philosophy and religion, and to some degree I wish it were true. But I don't believe so. Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
4 Line Poem Contest Entry in 1, 5, 5, 9 syllable
God and Man
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello, my friend,
Cool idea and good entry for the Four Line Poem contest. I have a couple of suggestions.
God
Only knows (man's) sin [God only knows one man? Do you mean -men-?]
Do live as you wish
(So) confess God to save or punish[syntax is all wrong]
Suggestion....
God
knows human beings' sins
We know right and wrong
So confess to God for peace of mind
Good luck in the contest.
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4 Line Poem Contest Entry in 1, 5, 5, 9 syllable
God and Man
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello, my friend,
Cool idea and good entry for the Four Line Poem contest. I have a couple of suggestions.
God
Only knows (man's) sin [God only knows one man? Do you mean -men-?]
Do live as you wish
(So) confess God to save or punish[syntax is all wrong]
Suggestion....
God
knows human beings' sins
We know right and wrong
So confess to God for peace of mind
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from TPAC
I feel the intent behind this read, feeling another stir of the ingredients detailed within, giving this probable suggest if proper for style. Suggest: God
Only knows man's sin
live as you do wish
confess God so to save or punish. Just my thought like both views.
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I feel the intent behind this read, feeling another stir of the ingredients detailed within, giving this probable suggest if proper for style. Suggest: God
Only knows man's sin
live as you do wish
confess God so to save or punish. Just my thought like both views.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Keegan McNeill
I'm personally not very religious so I'm obviously not the target audience of this piece, but I still think you did a good job writing it. The last line doesn't make complete grammatical sense but that is the only thing I will criticize.
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I'm personally not very religious so I'm obviously not the target audience of this piece, but I still think you did a good job writing it. The last line doesn't make complete grammatical sense but that is the only thing I will criticize.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
Comment from Kristopher J. Harrison
Phenomenal job! Such a powerful message with brevity expressed with unique substance and precision. You make this concept universal; you do this by directly tailoring your premise to a universal conclusion. Since God only knows man's sin, humankind chooses whether God will save or punish, which God is made irrelevant. In doing so, your poem ends with the reader not only examining their own sins but also the higher power they subject themselves to. Very well done, sir! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Phenomenal job! Such a powerful message with brevity expressed with unique substance and precision. You make this concept universal; you do this by directly tailoring your premise to a universal conclusion. Since God only knows man's sin, humankind chooses whether God will save or punish, which God is made irrelevant. In doing so, your poem ends with the reader not only examining their own sins but also the higher power they subject themselves to. Very well done, sir! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for this superb, super, significant, sound, simple and wise review with a six star rating, Sir.
Wish you every success for your chosen goal.
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Thursday
28/01/2021
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Well said! This right here is what we all forget and overlook. The people know nothing about the sins or good deeds of a person. We all love to judge and we are all judged as a result and not a single one of us knows the matters of the heart. Only God knows the true intentions of everyone and so, only He can judge justly and rightly.
Thank you for sharing and best wishes for the contest !
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Well said! This right here is what we all forget and overlook. The people know nothing about the sins or good deeds of a person. We all love to judge and we are all judged as a result and not a single one of us knows the matters of the heart. Only God knows the true intentions of everyone and so, only He can judge justly and rightly.
Thank you for sharing and best wishes for the contest !
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thanks for this professional review.
Thanks a lot for good wishes for the contest.
Wish you every success in your chosen goal
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Thursday
28/01/2021
Comment from royowen
Isn't it wonderful that the perfect Man/God, died for the sins of man and exists now in the heavenlies, to intercede for those that believe. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Isn't it wonderful that the perfect Man/God, died for the sins of man and exists now in the heavenlies, to intercede for those that believe. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Sir, for this great, gracious and gorgeous review.
Thanks for good wishes and blessings
Wish you every success for your chosen goal
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
28/01/2021
Thursday
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Most welcome
Comment from Iza Deleanu
It's scary that God only knows man's sin, I think He knows also the good deeds:), but I like the provocation of your four liner:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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It's scary that God only knows man's sin, I think He knows also the good deeds:), but I like the provocation of your four liner:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this good review and thanks a lot for your good wishes and wishing me good luck for the contest.
Wish you good luck for your chosen goal
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
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