Rime
a 1-6-112 total reviews
Comment from Susan Newell
I always find it hard to use 150 characters to review a short poem. I found this one to be particularly skillful. What more can I say than, "I get it."
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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I always find it hard to use 150 characters to review a short poem. I found this one to be particularly skillful. What more can I say than, "I get it."
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Here is what I do:
This 1-6-1 poem, Rime, has the proper syllabic formatting and is skillfully put together. I get that RIME has multiple meanings here...........
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Thanks. That may help
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Bill,
Thank you for this poem; I learned a new word. There is a lot of "rime" in my part of the country in winter.
The photo you provide gives an accurate definition of rime. It makes me shiver.
I like your words, "I'm frozen and lost to time." The house looks as though it was preserved from a time long ago, or "lost" as you put it.
I like this poem very much,
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Bill,
Thank you for this poem; I learned a new word. There is a lot of "rime" in my part of the country in winter.
The photo you provide gives an accurate definition of rime. It makes me shiver.
I like your words, "I'm frozen and lost to time." The house looks as though it was preserved from a time long ago, or "lost" as you put it.
I like this poem very much,
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Cindy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 1-6-1 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good rhymes. Ck you wrote time (rhyme)
Well done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 1-6-1 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good rhymes. Ck you wrote time (rhyme)
Well done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you, GBR
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh, gosh, Bill, one has to wonder which came first, the poem or the artwork.
Based upon the artwork, you are literally frozen in time, at least until the snow melts.
Excellent usage of minimalism and rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Oh, gosh, Bill, one has to wonder which came first, the poem or the artwork.
Based upon the artwork, you are literally frozen in time, at least until the snow melts.
Excellent usage of minimalism and rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you, PF
Comment from Mia Twysted
Nice picture. This is why I am not fond of snow. To many blizards in my past growing up.
I understand the cold leaves you stuck unable to move on and so you are as you were when it first fell and hardened.
After reading the piece I went on to familize myself with the word "rime" as I was not sure if it was spelled right having not really known the word. As I did this it made the piece stand out to me more. Stuck and unable to move on both physically and emotionally.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Nice picture. This is why I am not fond of snow. To many blizards in my past growing up.
I understand the cold leaves you stuck unable to move on and so you are as you were when it first fell and hardened.
After reading the piece I went on to familize myself with the word "rime" as I was not sure if it was spelled right having not really known the word. As I did this it made the piece stand out to me more. Stuck and unable to move on both physically and emotionally.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Mia, for giving this a good look.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Very clever. I'm glad you included the definition of rime. It wasn't a word I'd come across before, but it describes the current polar vortex in my community well. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Very clever. I'm glad you included the definition of rime. It wasn't a word I'd come across before, but it describes the current polar vortex in my community well. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thanks, RS
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
I am so thankful you defined rime for me because I had no idea
how it fit in this poem until I read your author's notes. To be
honest, I thought maybe you were doing a spin on the word
rhyme. Good picture to go with your 1-6-1 poem. Good luck in
this contest.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I am so thankful you defined rime for me because I had no idea
how it fit in this poem until I read your author's notes. To be
honest, I thought maybe you were doing a spin on the word
rhyme. Good picture to go with your 1-6-1 poem. Good luck in
this contest.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thanks, RFM
Comment from DonandVicki
Plenty of rime ice there. I like how the photograph you chose complements your poem. The rime ice stops time completely. Very well composed. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Plenty of rime ice there. I like how the photograph you chose complements your poem. The rime ice stops time completely. Very well composed. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thanks, DandV
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-Thanks for the note, too.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic and rhyme.
-I like how you take on the
persona of the house and
create a vivid word picture
with a few words.
-Without the picture, it would
still make a good poem because
of the second line lending itself
to one's imagination.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-Thanks for the note, too.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic and rhyme.
-I like how you take on the
persona of the house and
create a vivid word picture
with a few words.
-Without the picture, it would
still make a good poem because
of the second line lending itself
to one's imagination.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Pam
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You are very welcome.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Your piece is whole lot better now. You've chosen a great picture to accompany it. The rhymes fit perfectly. Again, I wish you the best of luck in the voting.
DS
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Your piece is whole lot better now. You've chosen a great picture to accompany it. The rhymes fit perfectly. Again, I wish you the best of luck in the voting.
DS
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Reread rules and re-wrote it. It's now called Rime
