Attitude Shift
Lets all have an...21 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Very good theme, and your thoughtful words expressed are both a plea, and an order. They come at the climax of some very disturbing and unsettling times, so are very relevant.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Very good theme, and your thoughtful words expressed are both a plea, and an order. They come at the climax of some very disturbing and unsettling times, so are very relevant.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thabk you so much for reading my poem :)
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
Your poem has an important message: every individual can do something
for the greater good just by controlling his own anger. The photo you've chosen complements your words. Did you intentionally place a comma after "increase"? I suggest eliminating it because it detracts from "peace."
With the comma, the message seems to stop at "increase" and then ends with a signoff like "peace out." Without the comma the message means (to me) that when you cease all anger, you increase (as anger makes you smaller) and then flows to the next line as "increase peace." I think you get to make two messages without the comma.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Your poem has an important message: every individual can do something
for the greater good just by controlling his own anger. The photo you've chosen complements your words. Did you intentionally place a comma after "increase"? I suggest eliminating it because it detracts from "peace."
With the comma, the message seems to stop at "increase" and then ends with a signoff like "peace out." Without the comma the message means (to me) that when you cease all anger, you increase (as anger makes you smaller) and then flows to the next line as "increase peace." I think you get to make two messages without the comma.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Ok, thank you for the suggestion and this nice review. :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your eight syllables in this lovely poem. The powerful message is well conveyed. Those who are angry most, or all, of the time need to see that their mindset is mostly just a bad HABIT.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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You have made excellent use of your eight syllables in this lovely poem. The powerful message is well conveyed. Those who are angry most, or all, of the time need to see that their mindset is mostly just a bad HABIT.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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You are right. We can change and become more tolerant, we just need to change the way we think. Thanks for reviewing. :)
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the title: "Attitude Shift." It is true, anger does not do anyone anything good.
People should control their anger and find ways to keep harmony at home and in social gatherings.
Happy writing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I like the title: "Attitude Shift." It is true, anger does not do anyone anything good.
People should control their anger and find ways to keep harmony at home and in social gatherings.
Happy writing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this great review.:)
Comment from equestrik
Yes, let's do this and increase peace. It is sometimes difficult to let go of whatone believes tobe true and right in order to have more peace. I think all of us want this, at least I hope so.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Yes, let's do this and increase peace. It is sometimes difficult to let go of whatone believes tobe true and right in order to have more peace. I think all of us want this, at least I hope so.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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It is time to try anyway. Thank you for reviewing my poem. :)
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Very beautiful 1-6-1 poem. Nicely written. I Love your photo a dove to symbolize peace. It goes well with your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This is a Very beautiful 1-6-1 poem. Nicely written. I Love your photo a dove to symbolize peace. It goes well with your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review. :)
Comment from mermaids
This is a poem to be read by everyone. We need to all come together and promote peace, especially with this pandemic. Excellent 1-6-1 form and use of words that has meaning and is relevant to today.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This is a poem to be read by everyone. We need to all come together and promote peace, especially with this pandemic. Excellent 1-6-1 form and use of words that has meaning and is relevant to today.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I agree, we all need to foster a peaceful world...even if it's with one person at a time. Thanks for reading. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Attitude Shift, has the right set up and suggests that we need a core shift in personal policy which facilitates a movement towards niceness.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This 1-6-1, Attitude Shift, has the right set up and suggests that we need a core shift in personal policy which facilitates a movement towards niceness.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for taking time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great message in a poem, Mystery Writer. Your picture pairs well with your well-chosen words. Your syllable count is correct per line.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This is a great message in a poem, Mystery Writer. Your picture pairs well with your well-chosen words. Your syllable count is correct per line.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Carol Clark2
This 1-6-1 poem packs a lot of meaning into a very few words. I like the picture of the dove carrying the peace sign -- maybe made out of an olive branch? This poem is a great contest entry.
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This 1-6-1 poem packs a lot of meaning into a very few words. I like the picture of the dove carrying the peace sign -- maybe made out of an olive branch? This poem is a great contest entry.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review. :)
