Josh
evil versus ice-cream11 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Hahaha, what a fun story, Iza. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture fits perfectly with your words. Those words read smoothly with great imagery. I like how the problem was solved. I also like the way you used bold formatting. Not only is it easier to see, I believe it adds more of a prominence to your words.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Hahaha, what a fun story, Iza. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture fits perfectly with your words. Those words read smoothly with great imagery. I like how the problem was solved. I also like the way you used bold formatting. Not only is it easier to see, I believe it adds more of a prominence to your words.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you:)
Comment from Susan Larson
I wondered if there was some symbolism in Josh's name, but then thought probably not. Was he a devil or another angel? Maybe wondering about that is part of the intrigue. It does flow well and kept my attention.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I wondered if there was some symbolism in Josh's name, but then thought probably not. Was he a devil or another angel? Maybe wondering about that is part of the intrigue. It does flow well and kept my attention.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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No symbolism, and Josh is the evil guy:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Josh, has the required word count and finds what seem like a couple of angels playing tag with people's lives.
Wonder about this: swipe spots I'm not getting that. Is this SWITCH spots? or SWAP spots?
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This one-hundred-word story, Josh, has the required word count and finds what seem like a couple of angels playing tag with people's lives.
Wonder about this: swipe spots I'm not getting that. Is this SWITCH spots? or SWAP spots?
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I didn't know that angels can age, but this Josh sure sounds like a troublemaker! It seems like his victims are the ones who need a guardian angel, rather than him!
Suggestion:
We need a schedule: Monday, Tuesday chasing each other, and for the rest of the week, just relax and enjoying this break on Earth.
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We need a schedule: Monday and Tuesday, chasing each other, and for the rest of the week, relaxing and enjoying this break on Earth.
The picture is very funny.
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I didn't know that angels can age, but this Josh sure sounds like a troublemaker! It seems like his victims are the ones who need a guardian angel, rather than him!
Suggestion:
We need a schedule: Monday, Tuesday chasing each other, and for the rest of the week, just relax and enjoying this break on Earth.
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We need a schedule: Monday and Tuesday, chasing each other, and for the rest of the week, relaxing and enjoying this break on Earth.
The picture is very funny.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
Comment from Mia Twysted
I read this as from the angel's point of view. They have so much to do looking out for teir subjets they themselves never get a break. No ever gives them enough credit.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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I read this as from the angel's point of view. They have so much to do looking out for teir subjets they themselves never get a break. No ever gives them enough credit.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this stellar review.
Comment from sunnilicious
That was a cute story. Well thougt out and nicely written. Angels and devils always on a chase. Definitely original storytelling. Nice artwork choice. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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That was a cute story. Well thougt out and nicely written. Angels and devils always on a chase. Definitely original storytelling. Nice artwork choice. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this stellar review.
Comment from equestrik
The picture you chose is a good one for the write. I like the ceative write and feel sorry for this poor angel. Good write for the 100 word contest. Best to you.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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The picture you chose is a good one for the write. I like the ceative write and feel sorry for this poor angel. Good write for the 100 word contest. Best to you.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this stellar review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. Good flash fiction form. You managed to tell a story in a few words.
I like the presentation...the picture of the old angel is funny.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. Good flash fiction form. You managed to tell a story in a few words.
I like the presentation...the picture of the old angel is funny.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this stellar review.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture. I don't envy your job of looking after Josh.
It is a tough job. I like the ending... schedules may work.
Good luck to looking after Josh and good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I like the picture. I don't envy your job of looking after Josh.
It is a tough job. I like the ending... schedules may work.
Good luck to looking after Josh and good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your good luck wishes:)
Comment from MissMerri
Hahahaha! Very funny little story. The poor angel in the picture sure does look like she's taken on more than she can handle. I hope they are able to work out that schedule so the poor angel can have some ice cream. I'd like some too! Good luck in the contest. MM
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Hahahaha! Very funny little story. The poor angel in the picture sure does look like she's taken on more than she can handle. I hope they are able to work out that schedule so the poor angel can have some ice cream. I'd like some too! Good luck in the contest. MM
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Thank you:)
