In the Uterus
Determined Tenderness8 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Love Poem writing prompt contest. Good form. You followed the rules...wrote a love poem without using the words love, kiss, romance, soul,heart, boyfriend, girlfriend, husband wife or sexual terms.
Kind of a medical outlook. A different kind of love poem.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Love Poem writing prompt contest. Good form. You followed the rules...wrote a love poem without using the words love, kiss, romance, soul,heart, boyfriend, girlfriend, husband wife or sexual terms.
Kind of a medical outlook. A different kind of love poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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My intent was to be different in the approach to a love poem. You got it! Thank you for your review and your time in reading.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from sammielwf
Determined Tenderness-
I loved your sub title to "In the Uterus- the voyage of the sperm to find the ova is one that I have told over and over in my 6th grade Health education classes- the reactions are always astonishment, laughter, embarrassment and then WOW! Followed by a few...that sperm is really tough huh? You mean the ova doesn't do anything except wait there? I am not sure that Determined Tenderness would help their understanding but- I think that it would be a wonderful follow up in my 7th and 8th grade classes.
I really enjoyed the verse that you crafted here Brigitte, well done.
Aside from my "teacher brain" that loves to include anything and everything that could make my classes better and more interesting- I want you to know that your poem is very well crafted and the message is both beautiful and real!
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Determined Tenderness-
I loved your sub title to "In the Uterus- the voyage of the sperm to find the ova is one that I have told over and over in my 6th grade Health education classes- the reactions are always astonishment, laughter, embarrassment and then WOW! Followed by a few...that sperm is really tough huh? You mean the ova doesn't do anything except wait there? I am not sure that Determined Tenderness would help their understanding but- I think that it would be a wonderful follow up in my 7th and 8th grade classes.
I really enjoyed the verse that you crafted here Brigitte, well done.
Aside from my "teacher brain" that loves to include anything and everything that could make my classes better and more interesting- I want you to know that your poem is very well crafted and the message is both beautiful and real!
Sammielwf
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Wow! This review is the best that I have ever received and I thank you wholeheartedly. I am a teacher (retired) also. I am home schooling my granddaughter who is in second grade. Keeping lessons interesting and challenging was second nature to me for many years. Teaching gifted children was great fun though challenging me on a daily basis. Any object, event, or emotion became an instant lesson and most of the time more rewarding than any plans. It pleases me that you found this worthy of praise. Use it! Thank you for the stars and the inspiring words; it will keep me writing and improving my craft.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from Wendy G
This is a lovely poem, and well written. It conforms to the requirements of the competition, and is supported by a beautiful image, the outcome of love. Good wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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This is a lovely poem, and well written. It conforms to the requirements of the competition, and is supported by a beautiful image, the outcome of love. Good wishes.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your kind review and taking the time to read my little poem.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. Nice love poem with out using the banned words. Easy read, nice emotion, good use of Free Form, supported well by the art work. Great job, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Very good. Nice love poem with out using the banned words. Easy read, nice emotion, good use of Free Form, supported well by the art work. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the read and the supportive comments. having restraints in writing is never easy when trying to convey a message.I appreciate your time very much.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from eliz100
You have met the requirements for the contest. It is a love story and you did not use any of the forbidden words. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. I like the picture you chose.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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You have met the requirements for the contest. It is a love story and you did not use any of the forbidden words. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. I like the picture you chose.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this kind and supportive review. Being a novice at poetry makes these tasks difficult but I keep trying to become better. I appreciate your time and read.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from Pantygynt
The question that leaps to my mind immediately on reading this is whether the second line contains sexual terms or not. I could make an argument both ways but I will leave that one to the Contest Entry Compliance Committee whose proper job it is to pass judgement on such matters. So, good luck with them!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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The question that leaps to my mind immediately on reading this is whether the second line contains sexual terms or not. I could make an argument both ways but I will leave that one to the Contest Entry Compliance Committee whose proper job it is to pass judgement on such matters. So, good luck with them!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I did not think of those words as sexual but biological. Thanks for reading.
Blessings,
Anon
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Biology! That's where I learnt about sex! Lol.
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LOl
Comment from Iza Deleanu
meeting for the first encounter
joining, ultimate perfection
coupled, growing
goal, survival and birth - and that is how love blossoms:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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meeting for the first encounter
joining, ultimate perfection
coupled, growing
goal, survival and birth - and that is how love blossoms:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading my love poem for the contest. I appreciate your feedback very much. The rating is very kind.
Blessings,
Anon
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a very interesting direction for the love poem contest. Certainly, the love between a man and a woman which blends together to make a baby is a wonderful definition of love. *smile*
The only note is that your title should be:
--> in ut(e)to
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a very interesting direction for the love poem contest. Certainly, the love between a man and a woman which blends together to make a baby is a wonderful definition of love. *smile*
The only note is that your title should be:
--> in ut(e)to
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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My bad, thank you so much for this appreciated help and for reading my entry.
Blessings,
Anon
