She
Found a perfect mate.77 total reviews
Comment from WriterHeather
This is so beautiful and sweet! The ending seems kind of sad though. The mention that you will never find another suggests that the lover is either passed or you have broken up. Still, I love this poem
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This is so beautiful and sweet! The ending seems kind of sad though. The mention that you will never find another suggests that the lover is either passed or you have broken up. Still, I love this poem
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from Pantygynt
This short piece, made up of four rhyming couplets, exemplifies the feeling of love without the need to many of the words often associated with the theme that are banned in this contest. The feminine rhymes in the final couplet make for a neatly tied up ending.
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This short piece, made up of four rhyming couplets, exemplifies the feeling of love without the need to many of the words often associated with the theme that are banned in this contest. The feminine rhymes in the final couplet make for a neatly tied up ending.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Congratulations on your work being recognized and on its being named one of the all time best. This is a simple, yet beautiful piece. It has a great rhyme scheme and flows well.
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Congratulations on your work being recognized and on its being named one of the all time best. This is a simple, yet beautiful piece. It has a great rhyme scheme and flows well.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from papa55mike
All of us search for that one who will complete us. But so many get distracted along the way. What a wonderfully written poem with a difficult prompt.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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All of us search for that one who will complete us. But so many get distracted along the way. What a wonderfully written poem with a difficult prompt.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from rjuselius
This is a strong contender although the rhymes seem every so slightly flat. But with limited words to work on, this does well.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
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This is a strong contender although the rhymes seem every so slightly flat. But with limited words to work on, this does well.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
Comment from Sumpta
I really enjoyed reading this love poem, just smiled and imagined how awesome it feels having someone who makes you feel better and be the best you can be.
Well done Linda, all the best.
Assumpta.
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I really enjoyed reading this love poem, just smiled and imagined how awesome it feels having someone who makes you feel better and be the best you can be.
Well done Linda, all the best.
Assumpta.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
Comment from Doug Jacquier
It's good that you're writing about your feelings but you seem to be grasping for rhyme instead of expressing those feelings more creatively. Rhyming itself is not a bad thing but it needs to suit the context and not get in the way.
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It's good that you're writing about your feelings but you seem to be grasping for rhyme instead of expressing those feelings more creatively. Rhyming itself is not a bad thing but it needs to suit the context and not get in the way.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
Comment from June Sargent
It is a grand feeling when we finally find our soul mate - one who raises us up and catches us should we fall. The words you have chosen capture that sense of oneness. The artwork to accompany your sentiments is lovely. Well done. (I have always loved the song She)
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It is a grand feeling when we finally find our soul mate - one who raises us up and catches us should we fall. The words you have chosen capture that sense of oneness. The artwork to accompany your sentiments is lovely. Well done. (I have always loved the song She)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
Comment from judester
A simple poem giving us a glimpse of new found love. To find someone to lift our spirits and change us for the better is a wonderful theme. Wishing you all the best in the new year, cheers, j
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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A simple poem giving us a glimpse of new found love. To find someone to lift our spirits and change us for the better is a wonderful theme. Wishing you all the best in the new year, cheers, j
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. I have a few suggestion that may improve it, if you want.
notes:
she entered (into) my life
she lifted me (up), freed me
- are these words needed?
offered cushion {if} I fell
- how about: when I fell
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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This is very nice. I have a few suggestion that may improve it, if you want.
notes:
she entered (into) my life
she lifted me (up), freed me
- are these words needed?
offered cushion {if} I fell
- how about: when I fell
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
