The Girl Next Door, book #1
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Comment from irishauthorme
This is a really good story. Your narrative is punctuated by good dialogue that shows, not tells, the state of mind of Frankie. Alyson is a good character creation that bolsters Frankie and give us confidence in the narrative.
You do need to edit out all those fractious A's, they disrupt your story. The last poem I posted had those all through it-don't know where they came from.
Good work, irish
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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This is a really good story. Your narrative is punctuated by good dialogue that shows, not tells, the state of mind of Frankie. Alyson is a good character creation that bolsters Frankie and give us confidence in the narrative.
You do need to edit out all those fractious A's, they disrupt your story. The last poem I posted had those all through it-don't know where they came from.
Good work, irish
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. I have deleted the entire thing and re-pasted it directly from my notes, without using the website spellchecker this time. Thank you for pointing out all those symbols. Hopefully, they are gone now. I appreciate your help. Hugs.
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After many long hours and a gigantic headache, I think I finally successfully removed all the symbols. Thank you again. Hugs.
