The bridge
sadness7 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Bridge, seems to be one that shows us someone at the end of trying and ready to take the plunge...................
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This poem, The Bridge, seems to be one that shows us someone at the end of trying and ready to take the plunge...................
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your use of the literary techniques will draw the reader in. Some will immediately identify. You metaphors give this poem a stronger impact. Hopefully this poem will help them to identify what they are feeling and experiencing. Hopefully, healing will come.
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Your use of the literary techniques will draw the reader in. Some will immediately identify. You metaphors give this poem a stronger impact. Hopefully this poem will help them to identify what they are feeling and experiencing. Hopefully, healing will come.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
Comment from equestrik
Fantastic bridge picture to illustrate your writing! What a gift to be able to write out your feelings and work through the pain. This is nicely done.
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Fantastic bridge picture to illustrate your writing! What a gift to be able to write out your feelings and work through the pain. This is nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
This line struck me as the crux and heart of the piece, "I'm hiding behind my soul" This poem is spot on direct and alive with images that take us on a real journey.
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This line struck me as the crux and heart of the piece, "I'm hiding behind my soul" This poem is spot on direct and alive with images that take us on a real journey.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
Comment from Wendy G
This is a well written poem, capturing the depression, sadness and anxiety of some-one who sees few options. Yet there is a small faith - is God there? Can He and will He help? Very thoughtful and thought-provoking.
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This is a well written poem, capturing the depression, sadness and anxiety of some-one who sees few options. Yet there is a small faith - is God there? Can He and will He help? Very thoughtful and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
Before I forget, do you mean 'Bridge' in the title?
I have to be honest - this was a bit abstract for me. I didn't understand what the 'control' part meant. Or the 'hiding behind my soul', 'yellow wall', 'crawling as a worm', or 'the mud'. Those places were very vague and a little over my head. Do you think you might consider adding more - or offering some help in the notes for understanding?
Thanks and good luck!
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Dear Mystery Author,
Before I forget, do you mean 'Bridge' in the title?
I have to be honest - this was a bit abstract for me. I didn't understand what the 'control' part meant. Or the 'hiding behind my soul', 'yellow wall', 'crawling as a worm', or 'the mud'. Those places were very vague and a little over my head. Do you think you might consider adding more - or offering some help in the notes for understanding?
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
This is a deeply sad poem that really is heartfelt. It's hard to feel like you don't know which way to turn, what to do, and where is God in all of this? I like the symbol of the empty bridge - that seems to go nowhere in your picture.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
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This is a deeply sad poem that really is heartfelt. It's hard to feel like you don't know which way to turn, what to do, and where is God in all of this? I like the symbol of the empty bridge - that seems to go nowhere in your picture.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
