When There Is Freezing Rain
A Quatern31 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Quatern poem with a compassionate theme worrying about a loved one walking home in very bad weather conditions. It is a natural reaction to worry about a lover's safety.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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A very well-written Quatern poem with a compassionate theme worrying about a loved one walking home in very bad weather conditions. It is a natural reaction to worry about a lover's safety.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you for sharing my poem, Sandra, and your kind praise.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
When There Is Freezing Rain
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Repeating line poem. writing prompt contest. It was a pleasure reading your Quaternpoem. Good form. I like the presentation too.
Lovely imagery....
The window pane is glazed with ice,
Your black umbrella and stout boots
Nice repeating refrain...
On nights like this I fear for you
Well done. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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When There Is Freezing Rain
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Repeating line poem. writing prompt contest. It was a pleasure reading your Quaternpoem. Good form. I like the presentation too.
Lovely imagery....
The window pane is glazed with ice,
Your black umbrella and stout boots
Nice repeating refrain...
On nights like this I fear for you
Well done. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Gypsy, for your praise of my poem.
Comment from Susan Larson
You used very descriptive words and your repeated refrain "on nights like this I fear for you" really drive home your theme. Your gray picture and gray background also set the mod very well for this poem.
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You used very descriptive words and your repeated refrain "on nights like this I fear for you" really drive home your theme. Your gray picture and gray background also set the mod very well for this poem.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Susan, for sharing my poem and your kind praise. I am especially pleased you think the refrain drives home my theme.
Comment from Alli Johnston
Anyone with a significant other or child will be able to relate to this poem. I am constantly telling my boyfriend to let me know when he gets home or when he gets to work especially when the weather is bad. Anything can happen
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Anyone with a significant other or child will be able to relate to this poem. I am constantly telling my boyfriend to let me know when he gets home or when he gets to work especially when the weather is bad. Anything can happen
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Yes, we all worry about our loved ones during inclement weather. I am so pleased you could relate to my poem. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
The quatern is a great style that uses a repeated line. Your repeated line fits in seamlessly, Mystery Author. It doesn't feel like it shouts, 'I'm a repeated line.' You did a great job with the rhymes, the smooth flow, the image choice, and your overall message of love and concern. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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The quatern is a great style that uses a repeated line. Your repeated line fits in seamlessly, Mystery Author. It doesn't feel like it shouts, 'I'm a repeated line.' You did a great job with the rhymes, the smooth flow, the image choice, and your overall message of love and concern. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your high praise of my quatern.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Good line to use for each verse, "On nights like this I fear for you." Very well expresses the fear we face when someone is late, especially when the weather is bad. Good rhyming
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Good line to use for each verse, "On nights like this I fear for you." Very well expresses the fear we face when someone is late, especially when the weather is bad. Good rhyming
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I am delighted you approve of my refrain. Many thanks, Anne, for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
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Comment from tfawcus
Perfect rhythm in this Quatern and a well-chosen repeating line to emphasise the worry. A splendid entry to the competition and one that will be hard to beat. Do this loving couple live at the North Pole by any chance? LOL
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Perfect rhythm in this Quatern and a well-chosen repeating line to emphasise the worry. A splendid entry to the competition and one that will be hard to beat. Do this loving couple live at the North Pole by any chance? LOL
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your praise of my poem. No, this couple lives in the Midwest of the USA.
Comment from amada
This is a great quatrain poem. it tells a dramatic story and the repeated lines fit perfectly with the moment in the story. I think this is a precious show of talent and imagery. Lovely work.
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This is a great quatrain poem. it tells a dramatic story and the repeated lines fit perfectly with the moment in the story. I think this is a precious show of talent and imagery. Lovely work.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, amada, for your wonderful praise of my Quatern.
Comment from Leann DS
This was a good choice of topic for a repeating line poem. As a mom and wife, I can relate to my loved ones being out in inclement weather, and not being able to stop worrying until they are home. Best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This was a good choice of topic for a repeating line poem. As a mom and wife, I can relate to my loved ones being out in inclement weather, and not being able to stop worrying until they are home. Best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I am so pleased you could relate so easily to my poem, Leann. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Raul1
This okay, but your first lines in each stanza isn't repeated. My advice is to change the lines revise it and self edit it. It is a good poem. I think that you should redo it. I'm just trying to help. No offense.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This okay, but your first lines in each stanza isn't repeated. My advice is to change the lines revise it and self edit it. It is a good poem. I think that you should redo it. I'm just trying to help. No offense.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you for sharing my poem, Raul. But please reread the prompt. It does NOT say the repeating line has to be the FIRST line of every stanza.
