When There Is Freezing Rain
A Quatern31 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
RodG:
Congratulations on winning the repeating line contest. I've
tried writing those in the past but mine sound contrived
and not a bit as smooth as yours. It's awful waiting for
someone to come home when they are late, but especially
tough when the weather is bad and they are on foot.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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RodG:
Congratulations on winning the repeating line contest. I've
tried writing those in the past but mine sound contrived
and not a bit as smooth as yours. It's awful waiting for
someone to come home when they are late, but especially
tough when the weather is bad and they are on foot.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for sharing my Quatern and your kind praise. This poetry form is challenging, but also fun to play with. Rod
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A beautifully penned poem expressing the worry for the safe return of a loved one. It is descriptive and full of love. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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A beautifully penned poem expressing the worry for the safe return of a loved one. It is descriptive and full of love. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for sharing and praising my Quatern. Rod
Comment from Boogienights
Congradulations on this wonderful poem, it was a well deserved win. I always worry about freezing rain, so this was all too real to me. The picture you chose was a perfect fit. :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Congradulations on this wonderful poem, it was a well deserved win. I always worry about freezing rain, so this was all too real to me. The picture you chose was a perfect fit. :)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for the congrats and your kind praise of my Quatern. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
It's always harder for those at home, waiting & praying that you get home safe and sound when there's a storm blowing. I remember the morning after an ice storm blew through Saint John many years ago. It was named the Groundhog Gale, February 2nd, 1976. I was 25 years old, just married, and my wife was waiting at home. I left for work, not knowing if there would be any power in the city. Telephone poles were blown over along Manawagonish Road. When I got to Moosehead Breweries, we were sent back home. There was just a few of us that drove in, maybe ten men. That was a terrible storm, one for the history books.
Your repeated line is very effective,
"On nights like this I fear for you."
You build the suspense in each verse. I especially like these lines,
"Don't drive," you said. "Don't pick me up.
The hike is but a mile or two."
I see you won the contest... Congratulations!
Nicely penned!
We've been very lucky so far this winter. Just two short storms so far, one requiring shoveling, the other needed my snow-blower.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hi Rod,
It's always harder for those at home, waiting & praying that you get home safe and sound when there's a storm blowing. I remember the morning after an ice storm blew through Saint John many years ago. It was named the Groundhog Gale, February 2nd, 1976. I was 25 years old, just married, and my wife was waiting at home. I left for work, not knowing if there would be any power in the city. Telephone poles were blown over along Manawagonish Road. When I got to Moosehead Breweries, we were sent back home. There was just a few of us that drove in, maybe ten men. That was a terrible storm, one for the history books.
Your repeated line is very effective,
"On nights like this I fear for you."
You build the suspense in each verse. I especially like these lines,
"Don't drive," you said. "Don't pick me up.
The hike is but a mile or two."
I see you won the contest... Congratulations!
Nicely penned!
We've been very lucky so far this winter. Just two short storms so far, one requiring shoveling, the other needed my snow-blower.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hi, Kimbob. I enjoyed reading your story about that big storm. Around here, people still talk about the Blizzard of ?67 which paralyzed Chicago. I am delighted you enjoyed my poem and I appreciate the congrats. Rod
Comment from mermaids
Your rhyming of words is so smooth and the concern is a strong voice. The reader is also concerned for this individual to return home safely. The line "on nights like this I fear for you" fits perfectly in your poem as a repeating line. You also have a strong steady beat in your poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Your rhyming of words is so smooth and the concern is a strong voice. The reader is also concerned for this individual to return home safely. The line "on nights like this I fear for you" fits perfectly in your poem as a repeating line. You also have a strong steady beat in your poem.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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I am very pleased you enjoyed my a Quatern. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Rodg,
This is a tenderly written poem about waiting for a love one to return home. Been there many times. It's an awful feeling. It's really stressful when you waiting on love one who is walking or jogging home, not driving. You definitely met the requirement of the repeated line and each stanza. Great rhyming of your end words. Nicely written. Lovely story.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hello Rodg,
This is a tenderly written poem about waiting for a love one to return home. Been there many times. It's an awful feeling. It's really stressful when you waiting on love one who is walking or jogging home, not driving. You definitely met the requirement of the repeated line and each stanza. Great rhyming of your end words. Nicely written. Lovely story.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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I am very pleased you enjoyed my Quatern, and could relate to the Speaker?s fears. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
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You are welcome.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
Amen
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
they are a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
I hate to go out when the weather is that bad
its not me I fear, it's the other driver
I know my love one was worry about me getting home safe....So was I
This was a good write
Have a blessed day
Cookie
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Amen
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
they are a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
I hate to go out when the weather is that bad
its not me I fear, it's the other driver
I know my love one was worry about me getting home safe....So was I
This was a good write
Have a blessed day
Cookie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Miss Cookie, for sharing my Quatern. I am very pleased you like it and the artwork chosen. Freezing rain terrifies me more than any other kind of precipitation because it creates black ice on the highway and slippery sidewalks.
Rod
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Your very welcome
Take care and stay safe
Cookie
Comment from Sally Law
A very well penned and illustrated poem for this unique contest. This highlights a fear we've all had at one time or another. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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A very well penned and illustrated poem for this unique contest. This highlights a fear we've all had at one time or another. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hi Sally. I am so pleased you like my Quatern and the artwork chosen. Yes, we all fear driving or walking when it begins to sleet. I appreciate the best wishes. Rod
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
I can most definitely relate to the concern expressed in your poem as I have been there! Having lived in Colorado for most of my life, I am thankful that I don't have to put up with icy and snowy roads very often any more since I live in Texas.
You repeating line poem is very effective in expressing worry, fear, and strong emotion.
Well done!
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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I can most definitely relate to the concern expressed in your poem as I have been there! Having lived in Colorado for most of my life, I am thankful that I don't have to put up with icy and snowy roads very often any more since I live in Texas.
You repeating line poem is very effective in expressing worry, fear, and strong emotion.
Well done!
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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I think many adults--especially senior citizens like me--can appreciate the concern I expressed in this Quatern, Susan. I am so pleased my refrain was effective. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, a well written poem that follows the rules of the prompt. Written in good rhyme - claus/treacherous a near rhyme perhaps? But the poem is good, tells a story and the repeated line in every stanza is well placed. A worthy entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hello anon, a well written poem that follows the rules of the prompt. Written in good rhyme - claus/treacherous a near rhyme perhaps? But the poem is good, tells a story and the repeated line in every stanza is well placed. A worthy entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
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Hi, Dorothy. I am so pleased you enjoyed my Quatern. Many thanks for your high praise. Rod
