Finding My Heart Again
a free verse love poem16 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
I certainly understand the sentiment of your poem, when loving emotions are centred on the beloved and we want to shower them with our tenderness.
Giving something then taking it back isn't very nice. All those tender emotions you gave to others were probably greatly appreciated - but if you feel they were wasted (as brushing away the past suggests), then by all means take them back to nourish a more deserving cause.
In an ideal world, our tender emotions will keep being produced in limitless quantities.... more possible when we 'find our hearts again' and are brave enough to overcome past hurts and disappointments to forge ahead with hopeful optimism to love and be loved.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I certainly understand the sentiment of your poem, when loving emotions are centred on the beloved and we want to shower them with our tenderness.
Giving something then taking it back isn't very nice. All those tender emotions you gave to others were probably greatly appreciated - but if you feel they were wasted (as brushing away the past suggests), then by all means take them back to nourish a more deserving cause.
In an ideal world, our tender emotions will keep being produced in limitless quantities.... more possible when we 'find our hearts again' and are brave enough to overcome past hurts and disappointments to forge ahead with hopeful optimism to love and be loved.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you Lisa. I really appreciate your comments on this one!!!
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is romantic and reminded me of your romantic Sonnet for the Sonnet class. It's an interesting idea of retrieving the past tender emotion and giving them to your love.
I have to remember to practice this.
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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This is romantic and reminded me of your romantic Sonnet for the Sonnet class. It's an interesting idea of retrieving the past tender emotion and giving them to your love.
I have to remember to practice this.
Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hi Lisa... yes, I am bandying about this concept and will post the sonnet with it too. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love the thoughts here. It's very romantic. If only we could focus a lifetime of tender thoughts on that one deserving person. What a gift.
I never have anything constructive to say about your work, because it is always so lovely. As a matter of personal taste, I would not end that second line with an "and." You would have to switch up some verb tenses and punctuation, but I think it would be worth it.
Even without my proffered change, your idea and images are probably enough to win the competition. There's so much love in your words.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I love the thoughts here. It's very romantic. If only we could focus a lifetime of tender thoughts on that one deserving person. What a gift.
I never have anything constructive to say about your work, because it is always so lovely. As a matter of personal taste, I would not end that second line with an "and." You would have to switch up some verb tenses and punctuation, but I think it would be worth it.
Even without my proffered change, your idea and images are probably enough to win the competition. There's so much love in your words.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hi Debbie. Thank you so very much. I will definitely go look at that.. and.. :). Really appreciate you, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from country ranch writer
I think when we get older we regret things in our life we'd like to change.,
We would like to recapture many things and make the right.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I think when we get older we regret things in our life we'd like to change.,
We would like to recapture many things and make the right.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Hello Barbara. Thank you for your wonderful review. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
Very sweet sentiments! Who could refuse such an offer? If only we could go back and collect all those wasted emotions to give them to someone who truly appreciates us. Well done!
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Very sweet sentiments! Who could refuse such an offer? If only we could go back and collect all those wasted emotions to give them to someone who truly appreciates us. Well done!
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thanks so much, Joan!!
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Melissa!
Sending you virtual six stars, my friend!
Your exceptionally well-crafted verse speaks to me on a number of levels.
My only thought - and you are going to laugh - is that I wish your offering was longer; I didn't want it to end!
Just beautiful!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Good Morning, Melissa!
Sending you virtual six stars, my friend!
Your exceptionally well-crafted verse speaks to me on a number of levels.
My only thought - and you are going to laugh - is that I wish your offering was longer; I didn't want it to end!
Just beautiful!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much Diane. I hope to add to it later. I was too eager to post it before my poetry class. I am so glad you like it. Thanks.
Melissa
